Re: [16NG] approving the ps-goals document

Thanks. I found one of these expressions in the abstract, changed as
follows:

  In the Abstract, please change "running the IETF IP protocols
  over IEEE 802.16" to "running IP over 802.16".

Was there more to change?

Jari

Daniel Park kirjoitti:
> One more changes here is:
>
> There are two "IETF IP protocols" in this document. Obviously, IP
> stands for Internet Protocol. It seems to be a weird expression.
> Suggestion is "IETF protocols or IETF IP"...but I don't have a strong
> opinion on that if IETF folks are ok for this expression as usual.
>
>
> Daniel Park
>
>
> On Dec 21, 2007 5:53 PM, Jari Arkko <jari.arkko@piuha.net> wrote:
>   
>> With revision -04, we are close to approving this draft in the IESG.
>> Here are the current RFC Editor notes that we'd need to resolve
>> remaining Comments and Discusses. The only substantive change is adding
>> a manageability goal that Dan Romascanu asked for in his Discuss. Let me
>> know in the next day or two if there's anything alarming in these changes.
>>
>> ----
>>
>>  In Section 1, please change the first occurrence of "BS" to
>>  "Base Station (BS)". Similarly, change the first occurrence
>>  of "SS" to "Subscriber Station (SS)".
>>
>>  Also in Section 1, please change "within the current 16ng WG scope"
>>  to "within the current scope of IETF efforts".
>>
>>  In Section 4,1, please change "within the scope of 16ng" to
>>  "within the scope of ongoing IETF work".
>>
>>  In Section 4.1, please change "not to wake up sleep/idle
>>  [IEEE802.16e] SSs" to "SSs which are in the sleep/idle mode
>>  [IEEE802.16e]".
>>
>>  In Section 4.3, please change "the problem of waking up the
>>  sleep/idle [IEEE802.16e] SSs" to "the problem of waking up SSs
>>  which are in sleep/idle mode [IEEE802.16e]".
>>
>>  In Section 4.4, please add the following to the end:
>>
>>    Goal #6. Define management requirements and specifically the
>>    interfaces and specific management model (objects) for IP
>>    over 802.16.
>>
>>  In Section 7, please change "16ng WG" to "IETF 16ng Working Group".
>>
>>  In Section 7, please change as follows:
>>
>>  OLD:
>>    the section 4, "Overview of the IEEE 802.16-2006 MAC layer"
>>  NEW:
>>    the section 3, "Overview of the IEEE 802.16 MAC layer"
>>
>>
>>
>>
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