Subject: Re: [6lo] Ben Campbell's No Record on draft-ietf-6lo-dect-ule-08: (with COMMENT)
From: Jens Toftgaard Petersen <[email-masked]>
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Date: Thu, 15 Dec 2016 22:05:41 +0000
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Hi Ben,

Many thanks for your review. See my comments below.

Best regards,
  Jens

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Subject: Ben Campbell's No Record on draft-ietf-6lo-dect-ule-08: (with COMMENT)

Ben Campbell has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-6lo-dect-ule-08: No Record

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COMMENT:
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I agree with Alissa's comments. Otherwise, I just have a few nits:

- Abstract: Please expand DECT.

[Jens]: Done in new revision -09

- section 1: The section could benefit from some paragraph breaks.

[Jens]: Good suggestion, done in new revision -09

- 3.2, first paragraph: s/ "implements already fragmentation"/"already implements fragmentation"
-- 4th paragraph:
s/"PP each have"/"each PP has"

[Jens]: Better wording - thanks. Is implemented in new revision -09