Re: [6lo] I-D Action: draft-ietf-6lo-use-cases-02.txt

houjianqiang <houjianqiang@huawei.com> Mon, 03 July 2017 12:47 UTC

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Hi Yong-Geun,

This version is clearer. Thanks for your hard work on this draft. I quickly went through this draft just now and found several minor flaws:

1. Abstract
   'PLC (IEEE 1901)'. Here it's better to use 1901.2 because 1901.2 is narrowband PLC, closer to 6lo
2. section 1, paragraph 1. 
    Link is missed for [RFC7228]
3. subsection 3.9, table 2. 
    "Tree No Mesh" for PLC. Mesh topology in PLC has been studied for several years and has its deployment. I would suggest to say star, tree, mesh.
    Security Reqmt: 'High'. You missed one 'H'
    Links are missed for "6lo-nfc" and "hou-6lo-plc"
4. subsection 4.1
    'QOS' -> 'QoS'. Second-to-last bullet in page 10 
    'ICPMv6' -> 'ICMPv6'. Second bullet in page 11

Regards,
Jianqiang


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A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts directories.
This draft is a work item of the IPv6 over Networks of Resource-constrained Nodes of the IETF.

        Title           : IPv6 over Constrained Node Networks (6lo) Applicability & Use cases
        Authors         : Yong-Geun Hong
                          Carles Gomez
                          Abdur Rashid Sangi
                          Take Aanstoot
                          Samita Chakrabarti
	Filename        : draft-ietf-6lo-use-cases-02.txt
	Pages           : 26
	Date            : 2017-07-03

Abstract:
   This document describes the applicability of IPv6 over constrained
   node networks (6lo) and provides practical deployment examples.  In
   addition to IEEE 802.15.4, various link layer technologies such as
   ITU-T G.9959 (Z-Wave), BLE, DECT-ULE, MS/TP, NFC, PLC (IEEE 1901),
   and IEEE 802.15.4e (6tisch) are used as examples.  The document
   targets an audience who like to understand and evaluate running end-
   to-end IPv6 over the constrained link layer networks connecting
   devices to each other or to each cloud.


The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-6lo-use-cases/

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A diff from the previous version is available at:
https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-6lo-use-cases-02


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