Re: [6lo] I-D Action: draft-ietf-6lo-use-cases-02.txt

[YongGeun Hong <[e-mail]>]

Dear Jianqiang HOU.

Thanks for your quick review and several comments.

In this updated version, many parts were updated.

Please, see my response inline.

On Mon, Jul 3, 2017 at 9:46 PM, houjianqiang <[e-mail]>
wrote:

> Hi Yong-Geun,
>
> This version is clearer. Thanks for your hard work on this draft. I
> quickly went through this draft just now and found several minor flaws:
>
> 1. Abstract
>    'PLC (IEEE 1901)'. Here it's better to use 1901.2 because 1901.2 is
> narrowband PLC, closer to 6lo
>
[Hong] In my knowledge, besides IEEE1901.2, IEEE 1901.1 is also related to
6lo because it can be used for smart grid and it is called PLC-IoT.
            As you said, if we focus a narrowband PLC, you are right. But,
if we don't focus narrowband, IEEE 1901.2 is also a candidate.
            I will discuss with other export of PLC and find the best way
to describe.


> 2. section 1, paragraph 1.
>     Link is missed for [RFC7228]
>
[Hong] O.K. It will be fixed in a next revision.


> 3. subsection 3.9, table 2.
>     "Tree No Mesh" for PLC. Mesh topology in PLC has been studied for
> several years and has its deployment. I would suggest to say star, tree,
> mesh.
>     Security Reqmt: 'High'. You missed one 'H'
>     Links are missed for "6lo-nfc" and "hou-6lo-plc"
>
[Hong] O.K. the proposed topology of PLC looks good and I will update. The
link of 6lo-nfc is located in clause 3.5. The link of hou-6lo-plc will be
added.

4. subsection 4.1
>     'QOS' -> 'QoS'. Second-to-last bullet in page 10
>     'ICPMv6' -> 'ICMPv6'. Second bullet in page 11
>
[Hong] O.K. These will be fixed in a next revision.

>
> Regards,
> Jianqiang
>
>
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> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts
> directories.
> This draft is a work item of the IPv6 over Networks of
> Resource-constrained Nodes of the IETF.
>
>         Title           : IPv6 over Constrained Node Networks (6lo)
> Applicability & Use cases
>         Authors         : Yong-Geun Hong
>                           Carles Gomez
>                           Abdur Rashid Sangi
>                           Take Aanstoot
>                           Samita Chakrabarti
>         Filename        : draft-ietf-6lo-use-cases-02.txt
>         Pages           : 26
>         Date            : 2017-07-03
>
> Abstract:
>    This document describes the applicability of IPv6 over constrained
>    node networks (6lo) and provides practical deployment examples.  In
>    addition to IEEE 802.15.4, various link layer technologies such as
>    ITU-T G.9959 (Z-Wave), BLE, DECT-ULE, MS/TP, NFC, PLC (IEEE 1901),
>    and IEEE 802.15.4e (6tisch) are used as examples.  The document
>    targets an audience who like to understand and evaluate running end-
>    to-end IPv6 over the constrained link layer networks connecting
>    devices to each other or to each cloud.
>
>
> The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-6lo-use-cases/
>
> There are also htmlized versions available at:
> https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-6lo-use-cases-02
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-6lo-use-cases-02
>
> A diff from the previous version is available at:
> https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-6lo-use-cases-02
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>
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