[6tisch] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-6tisch-enrollment-enhanced-beacon-09: (with COMMENT)

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Barry Leiba has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-6tisch-enrollment-enhanced-beacon-09: No Objection

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— Section 1.2 —

   The EB is used by nodes already part of a TSCH network to annouce its
   existence.

I can’t figure out the antecedent to “its”.  Can you rephrase this sentence to
make it clearer?

   There is a limited number of timeslots designated as a broadcast slot
   by each router in the network.

While “a limited number” looks as if it should be singular, it is generally
considered plural in usage and needs “are”, not “is” (and the plural “broadcast
slots”).  This is a tricky one...

You should also get rid of the “/s” later in the paragraph.

— Section 1.3 —

   if a pledge node does not hear an
   RA, and decides to send a RS

You should be consistent in use of “a” or “an”, and I think “an” works better.

In the numbered list, each item is a complete sentence and should start with a
capital letter.  You also should fix the sentence capitalization throughout
Section 2.

   This document defines a new IETF IE subtype

Please expand “IE” here.

— Section 3 —

   The Enhanced Beagon

Typo...

   validate the beacon, providing them with a trusted

The end of that sentence is missing.