[abfab] Review of draft-ietf-abfab-usability-ui-considerations-04

[Jim Schaad <[e-mail]>]

Here is my review of the document.  Overall I believe that the document is
ready to precede to WGLC.  A few small suggestions below.

1.  Need to expand HCI and UX in paragraph 2 of section 1.

2. ABFAB needs to be expanded on first use in the Abstract and in Section 1.

3.  RFC4282 has been obsoleted and should be updated.

4.  Suggest s/identities per organization/identities within an organization/

5.  In section 5.1 s/NAI superficially looks like/NAI looks like/  no
superficially about how it looks.

6. In section 6.1:  It might be reasonable to give the circumstances in
which the "Identity provider realm" is going to be different from the NAI
real

7. In section 6.5.2:  Should we potentially call out EAP as being one way of
doing automated modification?

8.  In section 7.6: Should highlight that enumeration is not a good idea.
Yes, it is a problem for headless.


I don't really expect that you are going to address either of these.  It
just seems to be "not so good" writing to my American ear.

Hobby Horse issue:  Get rid of the word 'will' in most of the document.  For
example, rather than "then something more complex will be needed." Can
become "then something more complex is needed".

Hobby Horse issue: Same thing with "could be".

Jim