Re: [alto] I-D Action: draft-ietf-alto-unified-props-new-09.txt

Danny Alex Lachos Perez <dlachosper@gmail.com> Wed, 25 September 2019 13:50 UTC

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From: Danny Alex Lachos Perez <dlachosper@gmail.com>
Date: Wed, 25 Sep 2019 10:50:15 -0300
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Subject: Re: [alto] I-D Action: draft-ietf-alto-unified-props-new-09.txt
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Hi Sabine,

I have a quick additional comment:

I believe that an example (sec. 9) of Aggregated Entity Domain is missing.
Perhaps you could re-use (or extend) the IRD example [0] and try to add a
couple of sentences to indicate equivalent entity property mappings (see
slide 17, 18 in [1]).

Best regards,

Danny Lachos
[0] https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-alto-unified-props-new-09#page-28
[1]
https://datatracker.ietf.org/meeting/105/materials/slides-105-alto-unified-properties-for-the-alto-protocol-02.pdf

On Tue, Sep 24, 2019 at 10:42 AM Randriamasy, Sabine (Nokia -
FR/Paris-Saclay) <sabine.randriamasy@nokia-bell-labs.com>; wrote:

> Hi Danny,
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> Many thanks for your review. I saw your last comment is in Section 9.7.
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> Should we consider that until section 9.7 your review is complete or will
> you have more questions?
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> We look forward to your other comments,
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> Best regards,
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> Sabine
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> *From:* alto <alto-bounces@ietf.org>; *On Behalf Of *Danny Alex Lachos
> Perez
> *Sent:* Tuesday, September 17, 2019 8:28 PM
> *To:* IETF ALTO <alto@ietf.org>;
> *Cc:* i-d-announce@ietf.org
> *Subject:* Re: [alto] I-D Action: draft-ietf-alto-unified-props-new-09.txt
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> Dear authors,
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> I started to read the “*Unified Properties for the ALTO Protocol*” draft
> (-09).
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> Please, see my first comments in the attached file (search for '[DANNY]').
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> Many of them are suggestions about clarity and format issues .
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> I will continue the review and send additional comments in a short time.
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> Best regards,
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> Danny Lachos
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> On Wed, Sep 4, 2019 at 10:41 AM <internet-drafts@ietf.org>; wrote:
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> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts
> directories.
> This draft is a work item of the Application-Layer Traffic Optimization WG
> of the IETF.
>
>         Title           : Unified Properties for the ALTO Protocol
>         Authors         : Wendy Roome
>                           Sabine Randriamasy
>                           Y. Richard Yang
>                           Jingxuan Jensen Zhang
>                           Kai Gao
>         Filename        : draft-ietf-alto-unified-props-new-09.txt
>         Pages           : 43
>         Date            : 2019-09-04
>
> Abstract:
>    This document extends the Application-Layer Traffic Optimization
>    (ALTO) Protocol [RFC7285] by generalizing the concept of "endpoint
>    properties" to generic types of entities, and by presenting those
>    properties as maps, similar to the network and cost maps in
>    [RFC7285].
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> The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-alto-unified-props-new/
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> There are also htmlized versions available at:
> https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-alto-unified-props-new-09
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-alto-unified-props-new-09
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> A diff from the previous version is available at:
> https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-alto-unified-props-new-09
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