[alto] Reviews on draft-gao-alto-fcs-02
Kai Gao <gaok12@mails.tsinghua.edu.cn> Tue, 27 June 2017 13:09 UTC
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Subject: [alto] Reviews on draft-gao-alto-fcs-02
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Dear authors of draft-gao-alto-fcs, I have roughly reviewed the latest FCS draft. Please see the comments below. Regards, Kai Terminology: sX: section X ppX: page X pX: paragraph X lX: line X pp3, s1, p1 l2: scenario -> scenarios l3-4: "... the P2P application ..." -> "... P2P applications ..." pp3, s1 p2, l2: central -> centralized p2 & p3: I think these two paragraphs can benefit from some restructuring to make the motivations for flow-based query more explicit and also easier to read. pp3, s1, p5 l1: consider -> describe l3: schema -> schemas pp4, s1, p1 l2: "... 5-tuples of ..." -> Use the explicit form of the 5-tuple: "... 5-tuple <ip-protocol, ...>" l6: "SHOULD support" -> "supports" l7: "to satisfy" -> "and satisfies" pp5, s3.1.2, p5 l4: "appeared" -> "appear" pp6, s3.2 title: "Extend" -> "Extended" p2, l2: "... to measure the cost" -> "... to specify the request" p2, l3: "SHOULD" -> "MUST" p2, l4: "be" -> "have" p2, l5: "format" -> "formats" p4, l2: Extra space after "TypedEndpointAddr" pp6, s3.2.1, p1 l1: "contain" -> "can be" l4: "specified" -> remove it. l5: "be conflict" -> "conflict" l6: "is conflict" -> "conflicts" pp7, s3.2.3, p1: Use "Protocol" instead of "protocol" to make it explicit that it represents the value contained in the query. pp8 s3.3.1, p1, l1: Remove "then" s3.3.2, p6, l4: "appeared" -> "appear" s3.3.3, p1, l2: "exactly" -> "exactly the same" s4, title: Example -> Examples pp14, s4.2.3, p4, l3: "value types" -> "value type" pp15, s4.2.5.1, p1, l5: ", the servers" -> ". The servers" pp16, s4.2.5, p3, l3: "TypedHeadreField" -> "TypedHeaderField"
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