[alto] Review for draft-ietf-alto-performance-metrics-12
kaigao@scu.edu.cn Sat, 10 October 2020 07:24 UTC
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Subject: [alto] Review for draft-ietf-alto-performance-metrics-12
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Dear ALTO WG, Below is my review for the performance metrics draft. The document is well written and easy to follow. The specifications are also well-organized. I do not see major problems with the technical contents. However, there are a few typos and inconsistent usage of terms, as listed below. Best, Kai ====================================================================== Page 5: para 1: rough -> roughly, max -> maximum Page 6, sec 2.1 remove "and" before sla latency typically do -> does "SHOULD NOT" -> "MUST NOT", "can be placed" -> "must be placed" Page 7, para 1: a "sla" -> an "sla" after figure 1, para 1: "estimation -> "estimation" Page 8, with letter p -> with letter "p" Page 15, example: delay-var -> delay-variation Page 28: ALTO Server and Client -> ALTO server and client Page 29: "Since he ..." -> The paragraph is repeated and should be removed ==========================================================