[alto] Review of draft-ietf-alto-incr-update-sse-07

[Jensen Zhang <[e-mail]>]

Document: draft-ietf-alto-incr-update-sse-07
Reviewer: Jensen Zhang

Summary: I have reviewed the latest update of this document. Overall, it is
well-written. I think It is almost ready to be last called once the
following points are addressed.

Comments:

Section 3., paragraph 0:

 3.  Terms

  This section is still empty. I feel the usage of some frequently
  appeared concepts (e.g. "update stream", "update stream resource",
  "update stream message", "update stream instance", etc.) is confusing
  and inconsistent. Authors can consider to define them precisely in
  this section.


Section 5., paragraph 2:

>    The building block of the update mechanism defined in this document
>    is update stream resources (defined in Section 7), where each update
>    stream resource (or update stream for short) is a POST-mode service

  Here introduced "update stream" as a new concept, but the definition
  may be inconsistent with the usage below.


Section 6., paragraph 1:

>    We now define the details of ALTO incremental update.  Specifically,
>    an update stream consists of a stream of update events (Section 6.2)

  update stream -> update stream message?  Because in Section 5,
  update stream is short for update stream resource.


Section 6.1., paragraph 1:

>    Update and control events have the same basic structure.  The data
>    field is a JSON object, and the event field contains the media type
>    of the data field, and an optional client id.  Update events use the
>    client id to identify the ALTO resource to which the update message
>    applies.  Client ids MUST follow the rules for ALTO ResourceIds (see
>    {10.2} of [RFC7285].  Client ids MUST be unique within an update
>    stream, but need not be globally unique.  For example, if a client

  The same problem as above. I think "update stream" indicates
  "update stream message" here.


Section 6.1., paragraph 7:

>    Note that an update stream does not use the SSE "id" field.

  The same problem as above.


Section 6.3., paragraph 3:

>    The "control-uri" field is the URI of the stream control resource for
>    this update stream (see Section 8).  The ALTO server MUST send a
>    control event with that URI as the first event in an update stream.

  The same problem as above.


Section 7., paragraph 2:

>    When a server creates a new update stream, it also creates a new
>    stream control service for that update stream.  A client uses the

  I think the two "update stream"s here mean "update stream instance"s.


Section 7., paragraph 3:

>    stream control service to remove resources from the update stream
>    instance, or to request updates for additional resources.  A client
>    cannot obtain the stream control service through the IRD.  Instead,
>    the first event that the server sends to the client has the URI for
>    the associated control service (see Section 6.3.

  Missing right parenthesis.


Section 7.3., paragraph 1:

>    An ALTO client specifies the parameters for the new update stream by

  update stream -> update stream instance.


Best,
Jensen