Re: [alto] Second WGLC of draft-ietf-alto-cost-calendar (version -12)

Kai GAO <godrickk@gmail.com> Sun, 21 July 2019 05:40 UTC

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Date: Sun, 21 Jul 2019 13:40:18 +0800
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Subject: Re: [alto] Second WGLC of draft-ietf-alto-cost-calendar (version -12)
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Hi Sabine and all,

I reviewed the diff between -11 and -12. The changes generally look good
but I spotted some minor issues:

- Title of Section 3.1: resources -> resource or resource's.
- In the first sentence of the last paragraph in section 2.4, the term
"cost Calendar" should be capitalized.
- In Section 4.1 and Section 5, some contents are using "ALTO client"
instead of "ALTO Client".

Best,
Kai


On Sat, Jul 20, 2019 at 11:51 AM Jensen Zhang <jingxuan.n.zhang@gmail.com>
wrote:

> Hi all,
>
> I reviewed the whole diff of the cost calendar draft between version -11
> and version -12. The modification looks good to me. I only have one small
> suggestion:
>
> In the new section 2.1 "Terminology":
>
> o  Calendar, Cost Calendar: When used with a capital "C", these terms
>
>    refer to an ALTO Cost Calendar.
>
>
> 'with a capital "C"' may be confusing here. Because the first letters of both "Cost" and "Calendar" are 'C'.  People may think "Cost calendar" is also a term. Maybe "with capitalized words" is better?
>
>
> Thanks,
> Jensen
>
>
> On Fri, Jul 5, 2019 at 3:10 PM Vijay Gurbani <vijay.gurbani@gmail.com>
> wrote:
>
>> One major correction:
>>
>> s/The current WGLC will be open until Jul-12-2019/The current WGLC will
>> be open until Jul-21-2019/
>>
>> The current WGLC will proceed until Jul-21-2019.
>>
>> Thanks.
>>
>> On Fri, Jul 5, 2019 at 1:53 PM Vijay Gurbani <vijay.gurbani@gmail.com
>> <vijay..gurbani@gmail.com>> wrote:
>>
>>> All: The chairs will like to start a second WGLC for
>>> draft-ietf-alto-cost-calendar-12 [0].
>>>
>>> During the first WGLC, a couple of discusses were raised as documented
>>> in [1].  More specifically,
>>>
>>> 1/ Ben indicated a couple of edge cases that need to be resolved.
>>> 2/ Alvaro noted that there is IPR tied to the precursor of this draft,
>>> as detailed in [2].  The chairs will like to ensure that the WG is aware of
>>> the IPR declaration inherited by draft-ietf-alto-cost-calendar, and duly
>>> considers it during the second WGLC.
>>>
>>> Version -12 of the document (the one being WGLC'd) addresses the IESG
>>> discusses and comments, as well as a review by one of the chairs (Vijay).
>>>
>>> The current WGLC will be open until Jul-12-2019 (the start of the IETF
>>> week).  Please post your comments on this draft to the WG mailing list,
>>> even if the comment is simply to say that you support (or not) moving this
>>> work ahead.
>>>
>>> The chairs  will summarize the status of the draft at the end of WGLC
>>> period.
>>>
>>> [0] https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-alto-cost-calendar-12
>>> [1]
>>> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-alto-cost-calendar/ballot/
>>> [2]
>>> https://datatracker.ietf.org/ipr/search/?submit=draft&id=draft-ietf-alto-cost-calendar
>>>
>>> Thank you.
>>>
>>> - vijay
>>>
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