Re: [Anima] Cross-WGs WGLC (second) on draft-ietf-anima-voucher-04 - Respond by Aug 08, 2017
peter van der Stok <stokcons@xs4all.nl> Tue, 01 August 2017 10:48 UTC
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Date: Tue, 01 Aug 2017 12:48:00 +0200
From: peter van der Stok <stokcons@xs4all.nl>
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Subject: Re: [Anima] Cross-WGs WGLC (second) on draft-ietf-anima-voucher-04 - Respond by Aug 08, 2017
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Hi all, I read this document, and find it well written and understandable. I do have some remarks about the content and several editing remarks. Content remarks: section 6, leaf prior-signed-voucher, at the end: The MASA SHOULD remove all "prior-signed-voucher". I would encourage a "MUST" instead of a "SHOULD" when thinking of transporting vouchers over constrained networks. section 6.3: leaf idevid-issuer, description, paragraph 2, "populated for serial numbers that are not otherwise unique" to be replaced by "populated when serial numbers are not unique". My proposed text is less selective, and consequently less error prone. Can a discussion section about "manufacturer additions" be added. Pointing out the consequences for interoperability when using "Augment" to add manufacturer specifics can be helpful. Editing remarks: Introduction, first phrase: pledge -> candidate device (pledge) page 3, PKCS#7 add RFC2315 reference, and may be add RFC7154 as JSON reference. Section 2; mention terminology from RFC7950 page 4 line 5; "process. i Typically" remove the "i" page 4, Voucher: add: that "acknowledges ownership of the pledge and" indicates... page 5 Authentication of: First appearances of PKIX, DNS-ID, and CN-ID abbreviations. page 5, add (MiTM) after Man-in-The-Middle. page 6 table: Voucher name -> Voucher type Nonceless Audit Voucher: "to support network partitions" -> "to withstand network partitions" Owenership audit Voucher: "Voucher's" -> "Vouchers", and remove "an ideal" otherwise explain what that means and why it is true. Add type in: Ownership ID voucher "type" is named Bearer Voucher "type" is named section 6 "The voucher is signing structure that" -> "The voucher signing structure" section 6, paragraph 6, all "of" the certificate, remove "of" section 6 page 7 below, First appearance of CA and JWS abbreviations section 6.1 (see section 4) add "see" section 6.3 page 10, module description: "securely assign one or more pledges to an 'owner'" seems to contradict section 7.2 voucher per pledge section 7.1 last line: "there is a delay" is that delay between creation and consumption and when is the delay unacceptable? the text is (on purpose?) vague. section 8.1 first paragraph: "no understandING of time", add "ing" section 8.1 paragraph 2: ephermal -> ephemeral section 8.2 compromized -> compromised? Hope this helps peter
- [Anima] Cross-WGs WGLC (second) on draft-ietf-ani… Sheng Jiang
- Re: [Anima] Cross-WGs WGLC (second) on draft-ietf… peter van der Stok
- Re: [Anima] [6tisch] Cross-WGs WGLC (second) on d… Michael Richardson
- Re: [Anima] [Netconf] Cross-WGs WGLC (second) on … Kent Watsen
- Re: [Anima] [6tisch] [Netconf] Cross-WGs WGLC (se… peter van der Stok
- Re: [Anima] [6tisch] [Netconf] Cross-WGs WGLC (se… Kent Watsen
- Re: [Anima] [6tisch] [Netconf] Cross-WGs WGLC (se… peter van der Stok
- Re: [Anima] [6tisch] [Netconf] Cross-WGs WGLC (se… Kent Watsen
- Re: [Anima] [6tisch] [Netconf] Cross-WGs WGLC (se… peter van der Stok