Re: [Anima] Alissa Cooper's Discuss on draft-ietf-anima-bootstrapping-keyinfra-28: (with DISCUSS and COMMENT)

Michael Richardson <mcr+ietf@sandelman.ca> Fri, 03 January 2020 18:34 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Anima] Alissa Cooper's Discuss on draft-ietf-anima-bootstrapping-keyinfra-28: (with DISCUSS and COMMENT)
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I have pushed -33 with changes as below.

tom petch <daedulus@btconnect.com> wrote:
    > On 31/12/2019 22:01, Michael Richardson wrote:
    >>
    >> tom petch <daedulus@btconnect.com> wrote:
    >> > Security Considerations, the YANG Guidelines RFC says that you must mention
    >> > TLS, HTTPS, etc and give pro forma text for doing so.  As long as you still
    >> > have a YANG module, as you do in s.3.4, I would expect those guidelines to
    >> > apply and so to see something like the pro forma text
    >>
    >> Please see:
    >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/rfc/rfc8366.html#section-7.4
    >>
    >> TLS is already specified and discussed at length in the document.
    >> If you want me to copy the second paragraph from there in, I can do that, but
    >> it seems like needless text.  You can't implement BRSKI without reading
    >> RFC8366.

    > Looking at -32:

    > Security; OK, leave it be.

    > IANA yes, that is (almost) what I wanted - I suggest that the title of 8.2
    > should be 'YANG Module Names Registry.

fixed, sorry, stupid copy and paste error.

    > References still trouble me.

    > The YANG module has
    > reference "RFC xxxx Voucher Profile for Bootstrapping Protocols"

    > I cannot find an I-D of that name - it is not the name of this I-D; do you
    > mean "Bootstrapping Remote Secure Key Infrastructure" which is the current
    > title of this I-D and which I would I think would not appear to be the same
    > reference to a layman?

I have fixed it to say:
    reference
         "RFC XXXX: Bootstrapping Remote Secure Key Infrastructure";

But, as this is actually the voucher-request, should it instead say something
about that?

I also saw:
    reference "RFC 8366: Voucher Profile for Bootstrapping Protocols";

I have fixed it to:
    reference "RFC 8366: Voucher Artifact for Bootstrapping Protocols";

    > Also on References, in -31 you had X.690 as a Normative Reference which I
    > thought spot on - now you have removed the reference which I think wrong.
    > YANG 'leaf proximity-registrar-cert' mentions X.690 so I think that
    > a) you need a YANG reference clause for the leaf

Dang. I removed that because I couldn't find a reference to it, because in
the YANG, the reference is not in the normal fashion.  I've restored the
reference and fixed the YANG description

    > b) you need a XML/HTML reference in the body of the I-D so as to avoid an
    > unused ref error - 'The YANG module makes reference to [X.690] ' {or
    > [ITU.X690.1994] }  is the way most authors address this

I've put a reference into an appendix that the RFC editor should remove,
which is what I started doing earlier this week, then discovered the section
appeared empty.

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