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Re: [Anima] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-anima-reference-model-08

Brian E Carpenter <brian.e.carpenter@gmail.com> Fri, 12 October 2018 05:22 UTC

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To: Joel Halpern <jmh@joelhalpern.com>, gen-art@ietf.org
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Subject: Re: [Anima] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-anima-reference-model-08
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Joel,

On 2018-10-12 15:17, Joel Halpern wrote:
...

> Nits/editorial comments:
>     The reference [IDevID] still appears to me to be a normative reference.

It is normative in draft-ietf-anima-bootstrapping-keyinfra, where it really 
matters. Seems like a marginal point in an Informational document, but of course
we'll follow the IESG's guidance.

>    In 3.3.3, the new parenthetical e.g. (replacing the wording "For example",
>    seems to have no closing parenthesis.

Ack.

Thanks
     Brian

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