[apps-discuss] APPSDIR review of draft-ohye-canonical-link-relation-04

Yoshiro YONEYA <yoshiro.yoneya@jprs.co.jp> Thu, 15 December 2011 09:20 UTC

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From: Yoshiro YONEYA <yoshiro.yoneya@jprs.co.jp>
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I have been selected as the Applications Area Directorate reviewer for
this draft (for background on appsdir, please see
http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/app/trac/wiki/ApplicationsAreaDirectorate).

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.  Please wait for direction from your document shepherd
or AD before posting a new version of the draft.

Document: draft-ohye-canonical-link-relation-04
Title: The Canonical Link Relation
Reviewer: Yoshiro Yoneya
Review Date: 2011-12-15
IETF Last Call Date: 2011-12-29
IESG Telechat Date: 2012-01-05

Summary:

This draft is almost ready for publication as an Informational RFC but
has a few issues that should be fixed before publication.

Major Issues:

- Section 8: Internationalisation Considerations

  Refering whole [RFC3986] is too broad. As noted in IESG writeups, this
  section should refer to section 8 of [RFC5988].

Minor Issues:

- Section3: The Canonical Link Relation

  Using similar terms such as canonical URI, target URI, and canonical
  target are confusing.  Including reference or definition of these
  terms is preferrable.

Nits:

- Abstract

  "canonical," -> "canonical",

Regards,

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Yoshiro YONEYA <yoshiro.yoneya@jprs.co.jp>