Re: [apps-discuss] APPSDIR review of draft-ietf-avtcore-monarch-13

Qin Wu <bill.wu@huawei.com> Tue, 29 May 2012 01:22 UTC

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Hi,Salvatore:
Thank for your valuable review. Please see my replies inline.

Regards!
-Qin
  ----- Original Message ----- 
  From: Salvatore Loreto 
  To: apps-discuss@ietf.org ; draft-ietf-avtcore-monarch@tools.ietf.org 
  Sent: Monday, May 28, 2012 6:56 PM
  Subject: APPSDIR review of draft-ietf-avtcore-monarch-13



  I have been selected as the Applications Area Directorate reviewer for this draft
  (for background on appsdir, please see  http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/app/trac/wiki/ApplicationsAreaDirectorate)

  Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.
  Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft.


  Document:  draft-ietf-avtcore-monarch-13
  Title:  Monitoring Architecture for RTP
  Reviewer:  Salvatore Loreto
  Review Date:  2012-05-28
  IESG Telechat Date:


  Summary:
  I have read and reviewed this draft.
  The draft is almost ready for publication as Informational, 
  but it has some minor issues (detailed below) that should be addressed.

  Major issues: 0 
  Minor issues: 2
  Nits issues:    4



  Major Issues:
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  Minor Issues:
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  Section 2
  the Interval, Cumulative and Sampled metric definitions are not clear (at least to me).

[Qin]: Agree. We fixed this issue on the list. Pleas see the discussion below:
http://www.ietf.org/mail-archive/web/avt/current/msg15336.html
http://www.ietf.org/mail-archive/web/avt/current/msg15332.html



Section 3.1

- at the end of the section, in the second to last sentence RFC5760 should be a real reference: i.e. it should also appear in the reference section.


[Qin]: Agree and will fix this.


Nits:
----
Section 2. Terminology


  - Application level metricsa.. s/ususally/usually[Qin]: Okay.Thanks.   - Composed metricsa.. An example is a metric calculated
      based on derived metrics that have been measure                "derived metrics" : perhaps it was meant "direct metric" ! anyway the all sentence should be clarified


[Qin]: Your are right. My proposed change is:
NEW TEXT:
"
   Composed metrics

      Metrics that are not measured directly but rather are derived by algorithmically 
      combining one or more measured metrics.  An example is a metric derived based on 
     direct metrics that have been measured.
"

  Section 3.1

  The "or" in the second list of bullets should be removed, the introduction should make clear that the entries are mutually exclusive.



[Qin]: Okay.

  best regards
  /Sal

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