[apps-discuss] AppsDir review of draft-ietf-6man-stable-privacy-addresses-06

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From: "He Xuan" <xhe@hitachi.cn>
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I have been selected as the Applications Area Directorate (appsdir) 
reviewer for this draft.  (For background on appsdir, please see 
http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/app/trac/wiki/ApplicationsAreaDirectorate).

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments 
you may receive.  Please wait for direction from your document shepherd 
or AD before posting a new version of the draft.

Document: draft-ietf-6man-stable-privacy-addresses-06
Title: A method for Generating Stable Privacy-Enhanced Addresses with IPv6
Stateless Address Autoconfiguration (SLAAC)
Reviewer: Eliot Lear and Xuan He
Review Date: April 22, 2013
IETF Last Call Date: April 26, 2013
IESG Telechat Date: not known

Summary: This draft is nearly ready for publication as an Standards Track
RFC.

Major Issues: none.

Minor:

In section 1, section 2 and section 6, it would be better to list detailed
quotation section number such as "see Appendix A.1" or "see Appendix A.2",
since there is a complex appendix. 

Nits:

In Appendix, 1st paragraph: (non-exaustive) should be a typo.

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