[apps-review] Apps-area review of draft-ietf-p2psip-base-18

"Vijay K. Gurbani" <vkg@bell-labs.com> Wed, 07 September 2011 22:23 UTC

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Subject: [apps-review] Apps-area review of draft-ietf-p2psip-base-18
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I have been selected as the Applications Area Review Team reviewer for 
this draft (for background on apps-review, please see 
http://www.apps.ietf.org/content/applications-area-review-team).

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments 
you may receive. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd 
or AD before posting a new version of the draft.

Document: draft-ietf-p2psip-base-18
Title: REsource LOcation And Discovery (RELOAD) Base Protocol
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: Sep-7-2011
IETF Last Call Date: Not known
IESG Telechat Date: Sep-8-2011

Summary: This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard.

Major Issues: None.

Minor Issues: 1.

Nits: Few.

Minor Issue:

- In S3.6.1, you may want a forward reference to a later section where
  the well-known server URL is used to fetch the configuration document.

Nits:

- S2, Terminology: Bootstrap node ---
  s/help Nlocate/help locate/

- S2, Connection Table: At this point, "Attach" message
  has not been described.  Maybe a forward reference to S5.5.1 will
  help.

- S2, Destination List ---
  s/A list of IDs/A list of Node-IDs/

- S9, bullet item towards the end of Page 104 ---
  s/(>1000)/(>1000 peers)/

- S9.5, right before S9.6 starts ---
  s/(n+2^(128-i)/(n+2^(128-i))/

Thanks,

- vijay
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