Re: [apps-review] Review of -- draft-ietf-appsawg-rfc3462bis-00

"Murray S. Kucherawy" <msk@cloudmark.com> Thu, 08 September 2011 16:19 UTC

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> -----Original Message-----
> From: Dave CROCKER [mailto:dhc@dcrocker.net]
> Sent: Thursday, September 08, 2011 6:05 AM
> To: Murray S. Kucherawy
> Cc: Apps Review
> Subject: Review of -- draft-ietf-appsawg-rfc3462bis-00
> 
> Minor Issues:
> 
>     Appendix A (Document History) needs a note to the RFC Editor to remove the
> section before publishing.

Fixed.

> Nits:
> 
>     The document repairs non-normative usage of normative vocabulary, to
> eliminate confusion.  It also changes normative vocabulary to be upper case, to
> aid detection.  However it appears that some of these changes were
> missed:
> 
> 
>  > 3. The multipart/report Media Type
> ...
>  > generated, for a human reader who may not have a user agent
> 
> may -> might

Fixed.

>  > report.  The text in the first section may be in any MIME
> 
> may -> MAY   {{ I believe. /d }}

I went with "can"; maybe it's just me, but "MAY" seems to invoke "OR MAY NOT" as a test to see if it was properly applied, and it feels like it fails here.  (That said, "can" isn't much better, but at least it avoids jabber about RFC2119 language.)

>  > details not present in the first body part that may be useful to
> 
> may -> might

Fixed.

>  > Return of content may be wasteful of network bandwidth and a variety
> 
> may -> can

Fixed.

>  > 4. The text/rfc822-headers Media Type
> ...
>  > to make them legal 7-bit content, they may be encoded with quoted-
> 
> may -> MAY

Fixed.

>  > 6. Security Considerations
> ...
>  > reports may cause the sender to incorrectly believe a message was
> 
> may -> can

Fixed.

Thanks for the review!

-MSK