[art] Artart last call partial review of draft-ietf-oauth-iss-auth-resp-02

Julian Reschke via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Mon, 01 November 2021 10:33 UTC

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Review is partially done. Another assignment may be needed to complete it.

Reviewer: Julian Reschke
Review result: Almost Ready

(I have reviewed this with zero knowledge of OAuth, so additional review
probably would be good)

Major issues:

2.4

"Clients MUST compare the extracted and URL-decoded value to the issuer
identifier of the authorization server where the authorization request was sent
to."

I'm not sure that "URL-decoded" is correct with respect to decoding query
parameters. Consider URLs containing "+" or "=". You probably need the encoding
rules for application/x-www-form-urlencoded instead.

Minor issues:

References to registries should not be listed as normative.

Nits:

Section links to external documents do not appear to be marked up as such (and
use a trailing dot in the section number which they should not)

There are no Acks; so section 6 should be deleted (if there were acksm they
should go into an unnumbered section at the end of the document)