[art] Re: Artart last call review of draft-ietf-raw-technologies-10

[Pascal Thubert <[e-mail]>]

Hello Jiankang

Many thanks for your review!
Please see below:

Le mar. 10 sept. 2024 à 13:58, Jiankang Yao via Datatracker <
[e-mail]> a écrit :

> Reviewer: Jiankang Yao
> Review result: Almost Ready
>
> I am the assigned ART-ART reviewer for this draft. The Art Area
> Review Team (ART-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
> by the IESG.  Please treat these comments just
> like any other last call comments.
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> Document: draft-ietf-raw-technologies-10
> Reviewer: Jiankang Yao
> Review Date: 2024-09-10
>
> Summary: Almost Ready for publication.
>
> This document presents a series of recent reliable and available wireless
> technology evolutions. It is very useful. The document is very long, and
> there
> still have some nits. It needs further improvments.
>
> One suggestion:
>
> Every section in sections 4, 5, 6 and 7 has the subsection"summary".
>
> How about adding a new section "summary" which tries to summarize all
> sections
> from 4 to 7?
>
>
Variations of this proposal were suggested during this round of review. To
keep the document structure I tend to like a bit better Mallory's idea to
push the summary section up in the protocol section.
Does that work for you?

Again, many thanks;

Pascal



> Best Regards
> Jiankang Yao
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Pascal