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Jiankang Yao <yaojk@cnnic.cn> Wed, 23 October 2024 06:36 UTC

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From: Jiankang Yao <yaojk@cnnic.cn>
To: Pascal Thubert <pascal.thubert@gmail.com>
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 Hello Pascal,

 Thanks, the proposed update is ok for me.



Jiankang Yao
 
From: Pascal Thubert
Date: 2024-10-11 17:24
To: Jiankang Yao
CC: art; detnet; draft-ietf-raw-technologies.all; last-call
Subject: [Last-Call] Re: Artart last call review of draft-ietf-raw-technologies-10
Hello Jiankang 

Many thanks for your review!
Please see below:

Le mar. 10 sept. 2024 à 13:58, Jiankang Yao via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> a écrit :
Reviewer: Jiankang Yao
Review result: Almost Ready

I am the assigned ART-ART reviewer for this draft. The Art Area
Review Team (ART-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
by the IESG.  Please treat these comments just
like any other last call comments.

Document: draft-ietf-raw-technologies-10
Reviewer: Jiankang Yao
Review Date: 2024-09-10

Summary: Almost Ready for publication.

This document presents a series of recent reliable and available wireless
technology evolutions. It is very useful. The document is very long, and there
still have some nits. It needs further improvments.

One suggestion:

Every section in sections 4, 5, 6 and 7 has the subsection"summary".

How about adding a new section "summary" which tries to summarize all sections
from 4 to 7?


Variations of this proposal were suggested during this round of review. To keep the document structure I tend to like a bit better Mallory's idea to push the summary section up in the protocol section.
Does that work for you?

Again, many thanks;

Pascal

 
Best Regards
Jiankang Yao





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Pascal

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