[AVTCORE] draft-ietf-avt-srtp-not-mandatory-13 review

John Mattsson <john.mattsson@ericsson.com> Fri, 11 October 2013 09:51 UTC

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I reviewed draft-ietf-avt-srtp-not-mandatory-13. Sorry for missing WGLC.

I think it looks very good and I only have a few minor editorial comments:

- Choose either: 
"RTP Control Protocol" or "RTP control protocol"
"RTP Payload Format" or "RTP payload format"
"RTP Profiles" or "RTP profiles"

- [p2] "Source-specific multicast (SSM)" and "multipoint conference unit (MCU)"
First letters should probably be capitalized in all or none of the abbreviations c.f. "Real-time Transport Protocol (RTP)" and "Secure RTP (SRTP)"

- [p2] semicolon at the end of first bullet (telephony;), but not at the end of any other bullet.

- [p2] "Any Source Multicast video (ASM) conferencing" -> "Any Source Multicast (ASM) video conferencing"

- [p6] "and it's associated" -> "and its associated"

- [p6] "that are can be independent" -> "are" or "can be"


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