[AVTCORE] AD Evaluation of draft-ietf-avtcore-rtp-multi-stream-optimisation-08
"Ben Campbell" <ben@nostrum.com> Mon, 09 November 2015 21:46 UTC
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Subject: [AVTCORE] AD Evaluation of draft-ietf-avtcore-rtp-multi-stream-optimisation-08
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Hi, Here is my AD Evaluation of draft-ietf-avtcore-rtp-multi-stream-optimisation-08: Ben. ----------- Substantive Comments: ===================== -3.1, 4th paragraph: Is “SHOULD NOT…unless” the actual intent? That means you shouldn’t do it unless that condition occurs, or you have some other good reason and understand the consequences. (as compared to "MUST NOT … unless") -4.2, 1st paragraph: Does this refer to third-party observers? (That is, observers not involved in the signaling of support for rtcp-rgrp? -7.2, reference to RFC3264: Should this be a normative reference? I’m not sure 3.6 will make much sense without it. Editorial Comments: =================== -3.1, 5th paragraph: Option "A" is hard to parse. I suggest: "... if another reporting source exists, have it report on the remote SSRCs that the departing source reported ..." - 3.2.1, 2nd paragraph: Consider active voice for the first sentence, i.e. "This document defines..." - 3.2.2, 1st paragraph: Consider active voice for the first sentence, i.e. "This document defines..." - 3.6, 2nd to last paragraph: "... neither agents SHALL use..." Please restate as SHALL NOT/MUST NOT. -4.1, last paragraph: "approximately 8.9" That's a rather precise approximation :-)
- [AVTCORE] AD Evaluation of draft-ietf-avtcore-rtp… Ben Campbell
- [AVTCORE] AD Evaluation of draft-ietf-avtcore-rtp… Ben Campbell
- Re: [AVTCORE] AD Evaluation of draft-ietf-avtcore… Colin Perkins
- Re: [AVTCORE] AD Evaluation of draft-ietf-avtcore… Ben Campbell
- Re: [AVTCORE] AD Evaluation of draft-ietf-avtcore… Colin Perkins
- Re: [AVTCORE] AD Evaluation of draft-ietf-avtcore… Ben Campbell