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Stephan Wenger <stewe@stewe.org> Sat, 07 January 2017 00:27 UTC

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From: Stephan Wenger <stewe@stewe.org>
To: Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in>
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Subject: Re: [avtext] Alissa Cooper's Yes on draft-ietf-avtext-avpf-ccm-layered-03: (with COMMENT)
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Hi Alissa,
I removed the IESG exploder.
Please see below inline.
Stephan



On 1/3/17, 07:21, "Alissa Cooper" <alissa@cooperw.in> wrote:

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>- Section 5: s/dependent from each other/dependent on each other/

Done.

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>- Section 6: The formulation "the authors' current understanding" seems a
>bit out of place for a document that is a product of a WG/the IETF;
>perhaps "based on current information" or some such would be better.

My suggestion to address this issue is to simply remove “authors’”.  This would lead to changes similar to the following:

OLD:
The authors’ current understanding is that the prudent response to a SLI message received […]


NEW:
The current understanding is that the prudent response to a SLI message received […].

I think that is less clumsy than “Based on current information, the current understanding is that the prudent response to a SLI message received […]”.  I think it’s also more correct than “Based on current information, the prudent response to a SLI message received […]”, because there actually is something like an understanding involved in creating the recommendation--the “prudent response” cannot be directly derived from current information.

Does this address your concern?

Thanks,
Stephan
 

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