[bess] Benoit Claise's No Objection on draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-extranet-07: (with COMMENT)

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Subject: [bess] Benoit Claise's No Objection on draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-extranet-07: (with COMMENT)
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Benoit Claise has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-extranet-07: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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Editorial suggestions:

 

Summary: In general the authors provide dense English text to describe
this rules.   In general the English text contains valid complex
sentences.  However, a few things should be suggested:

 

1)      PTA – define it in a definition section or spell out the
abbreviation

2)      Phrases like  “the RT RT-R” become overly dense.  Use “Route
Target RT-R”.

3)      Breaking up section 6.2.1 – with subjection and subtitles would
make it more readable,

4)      P. 36 second paragraph.  The reason for the “MUST” in 1st full
paragraph is a bit vague.  It seems logical, but the reasoning is just
vague in the text.

5)      paragraph 2 in page 47 (section 7.3.1) is awkward, please reword.


6)      Paragraph 5 in page 47 (section 7.3.1) – does not explain why the
condition should hold.  The authors have done this in eac other case, so
it seems inconsistent.

7)      Page 53 – section 7.4.5 paragraph 3  “VRF route Import EC” –
please spell out first usage and give abbreviation (VRF Route Import
Extended Community (EC).