[bess] Ben Campbell's No Objection on draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-expl-track-12: (with COMMENT)

[Ben Campbell <[e-mail]>]

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draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-expl-track-12: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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Thanks for the work on this!

*** Substantive Comments ***

I support Mirja's DISCUSS.

- There is an IPR disclosure with possible royalties. The shepherd report says
there were no WG objections. How was the disclosure communicated? For example,
was the WG reminded of the disclosure at WGLC?

*** Editorial Comments ***

§3:
- Part way through the section, starting with "We also introduce a new notion,
the "match for tracking":", there is a section of text that has a significantly
different tone from the rest of the draft. It switches more of a lecture style,
then switches back. I suggest an edit pass to keep a consistent tone.  (I know
this is a question of style, and I will not press it further if people prefer
not to change it.)

- 2 paragraphs starting with "For a given C-flow..."
Why is this indented?