[bess] Documents shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd-06

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Subject: [bess] Documents shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd-06
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Authors

I am the document shepherd for this draft. Please see below for my comments. Please treat these as you would any other WG last call comments.

Please address these before I submit the document to the IESG for publication.

Best regards

Matthew

General:
The draft is well written and generally good to go. I have just a few minor comments.

Number of Co-Authors: There are 8 co-authors listed in the document header. Generally, the RFC editor expects this to be limited to 5. Please can you reduce the number, e.g. by moving the less active authors to a major contributors section in the draft.

RFC2119 language: There are a couple of cases where you may have intended to capitalise certain keywords. For example, in section 4.4 you write 'recommended' when perhaps 'RECOMMENDED' was intended, and 'not recommended' where 'NOT RECOMMENDED' might be more appropriate. Please go thorough and double-check.

Thanks

Matthew