Re: [bess] Documents shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd-06

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From: "Bocci, Matthew (Nokia - GB)" <matthew.bocci@nokia.com>
To: "Rabadan, Jorge (Nokia - US/Mountain View)" <jorge.rabadan@nokia.com>, "draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd@ietf.org" <draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd@ietf.org>
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Subject: Re: [bess] Documents shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd-06
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Hi Jorge

Thanks. Please can you double-check the reference to RFC 7342? It appears in your list of normative references, but does not seem to be used in the text.

Regards

Matthew

On 08/07/2019, 09:50, "Rabadan, Jorge (Nokia - US/Mountain View)" <jorge.rabadan@nokia.com> wrote:

    Hi Matthew,
    
    We submitted version 07, which addresses your comments.
    Thank you very much for reviewing.
    
    Jorge
    
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    From: "Bocci, Matthew (Nokia - GB)" <matthew.bocci@nokia.com>
    Date: Monday, July 1, 2019 at 2:20 PM
    To: "draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd@ietf.org" <draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd@ietf.org>
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    Subject: Documents shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-proxy-arp-nd-06
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        Authors
        
        I am the document shepherd for this draft. Please see below for my comments. Please treat these as you would any other WG last call comments.
        
        Please address these before I submit the document to the IESG for publication.
        
        Best regards
        
        Matthew
        
        General:
        The draft is well written and generally good to go. I have just a few minor comments.
        
        Number of Co-Authors: There are 8 co-authors listed in the document header. Generally, the RFC editor expects this to be limited to 5. Please can you reduce the number, e.g. by moving the less active authors to a major contributors section in the draft.
        
        RFC2119 language: There are a couple of cases where you may have intended to capitalise certain keywords. For example, in section 4.4 you write 'recommended' when perhaps 'RECOMMENDED' was intended, and 'not recommended' where 'NOT RECOMMENDED' might be more appropriate. Please go thorough and double-check.
        
        Thanks
        
        Matthew