Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib-02.txt
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To: Glenn Mansfield Keeni <glenn@cysols.com>, "Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang" <zzhang@juniper.net>, Benoit Claise <bclaise@cisco.com>, "EXT - thomas.morin@orange.com" <thomas.morin@orange.com>
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Hi Glenn, Thanks for your valuable review on the mibs. Best regards, Mach > -----Original Message----- > From: Glenn Mansfield Keeni [mailto:glenn@cysols.com] > Sent: Friday, May 13, 2016 4:48 PM > To: Mach Chen; Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang; Benoit Claise; EXT - > thomas.morin@orange.com > Cc: ops-ads@ietf.org; Martin Vigoureux; bess@ietf.org > Subject: Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib-02.txt > > Hi Mach, > I have sent the review on 2016/05/09. > > On 2016/05/09 0:01, Glenn Mansfield Keeni wrote: > > Jeffrey, > >> Thanks for your comments. I've addressed most of your comments >> in > the new revision: > > Thanks for your cooperation. I will need at least one more revision > with > the following comments/recommendations addressed before I will > be able > to complete the detailed review. In the following the numbers > refer to the > issue numbers in the initial review. The issues that are > addressed and > closed are not listed. For brevity, the issue > descriptions have been trimmed. > In case of doubts please look at the > response mail appended below. > > Hope this helps. > > Glenn > > On 2016/05/13 17:22, Mach Chen wrote: > > Hi Glenn, > > > > Based on your below response, we assume that you will do a detailed review > on the mibs, can you estimate when the review will be finished. > > > > Thanks, > > Mach > > > >> -----Original Message----- > >> From: Glenn Mansfield Keeni [mailto:glenn@cysols.com] > >> Sent: Tuesday, April 19, 2016 6:24 AM > >> To: Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang; Benoit Claise; EXT - > >> thomas.morin@orange.com > >> Cc: Mach Chen; ops-ads@ietf.org; Martin Vigoureux; bess@ietf.org > >> Subject: Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of > >> draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib-02.txt > >> > >> Jeffrey, > >> Thanks for the update. > >> Will get back to you after a detailed review is done. > >> > >> Glenn > >> On 2016/04/16 21:47, Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang wrote: > >>> Glenn, > >>> > >>> Thanks for your comments. I've addressed most of your comments in > >>> the new > >> revision: > >>> > >>> URL: > >> https://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-m > >> ib-03.txt > >>> Status: > >> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib/ > >>> Htmlized: > >> https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib-03 > >>> Diff: > >> https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib- > >> 03 > >>> > >>> Please see below. > >>> > >>>> 1. Abstract: > >>>> 1.1 A sentence on how the managed objects will be used by > >>>> applications for operations, monitoring and management > >>>> would be good. > >>> > >>> I had thought this would be standard/obvious for all MIB objects - > >>> the > >> read-write ones are used to control how a device works, and the > >> read-only ones are used for monitoring. Do I really need to say it explicitly? > >>> > >>> I see RFC 4382 has the following: > >>> > >>> This memo defines a portion of the Management Information Base > >> (MIB) > >>> for use with network management protocols in the Internet > community. > >>> In particular, it describes managed objects to configure and/or > >>> monitor Multiprotocol Label Switching Layer-3 Virtual Private > >>> Networks on a Multiprotocol Label Switching (MPLS) Label Switching > >>> Router (LSR) supporting this feature. > >>> > >>> Is it enough to say something similar? For example: > >>> > >>> In particular, it describes common managed objects used to > >> configure > >>> and/or monitor both L2 and L3 VPN Multicast. > >>> > >>>> > >>>> 2. Introduction > >>>> 2.1 Please give the full expansion of the abbreviations > >>>> appearing for the first time. (PE, VPLS,..) > >>> > >>> Fixed. > >>> > >>>> > >>>> 2.2 The terminology section is a bit terse. Explaining the > >>>> terms that are used, nicely with reference to the protocol > >>>> documents will improve readability. > >>>> e.g. > >>>> - PMSI, I-PMSI, S-PMSI, provider tunnels > >>> > >>> As the paragraph alluded to, this MIB needs to be understood in the > >>> general > >> context of L2/L3 multicast VPN and providing good explanation of the > >> terms is not attempted. The references for the terms are the the RFCs > >> for the relevant technologies. > >>> > >>> Having said that, I'll explain PMSI a bit further. > >>> > >>>> 2.3 Is there a difference between > >>>> "multicast in Layer 2 and Layer 3 VPNs , defined by > >>>> RFC 7117 and RFC 6513/6514" > >>>> used in the DESCRIPTION in the MODULE-IDENTITY > >>>> and > >>>> "multicast in BGP/MPLS L2 or IP VPN" > >>>> used in the DESCRIPTION of L2L3VpnMcastProviderTunnelType ? > >>>> If these are the same, it will be helpful to stick to the > >>>> same expression. If these are not the same, the dictinction > >>>> should be clarified. > >>> > >>> No difference. I was using "Layer 3" or "L3" but it was pointed out > >>> that the > >> layer 3 VPN is often referred to IP VPN in other RFCs and I was > >> advised to change it accordingly. Looks like I did not change all the cases. > >>> > >>> On the other hand, I noticed that RFC 4382 does use "Layer 3 VPN" so > >>> I'll > >> change it back. > >>> > >>>> > >>>> > >>>> 3. Summary of MIB Module. > >>>> An overview of the L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB will be good- the > >>>> structure of the MIB, short descriptions of the table(s) > >>>> including usage of the table(s) for management and/or by > >>>> other MIB(s). > >>> > >>> I had that, but have added one sentence about the only table. > >>> > >>>> > >>>> MIB definitions: > >>>> 4. MIB syntax checking: > >>>> smilint -s -e -l 5 mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB > >>>> 2>L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB.txt > >>> > >>> I used simpleweb's validation tool but looks like I did not use the > >>> strictest > >> level of validation. I've now fixed the following issues and verified. > >>> > >>>> > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:63: [4] {hyphen-in-label} warning: > >>>> named > >> number `rsvp-p2mp' must not include a hyphen in SMIv2 > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:64: [4] {hyphen-in-label} warning: > >>>> named > >> number `ldp-p2mp' must not include a hyphen in SMIv2 > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:65: [4] {hyphen-in-label} warning: > >>>> named > >> number `pim-asm' must not include a hyphen in SMIv2 > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:66: [4] {hyphen-in-label} warning: > >>>> named > >> number `pim-ssm' must not include a hyphen in SMIv2 > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:67: [4] {hyphen-in-label} warning: > >>>> named > >> number `pim-bidir' must not include a hyphen in SMIv2 > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:68: [4] {hyphen-in-label} warning: > >>>> named > >> number `ingress-replication' must not include a hyphen in SMIv2 > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:69: [4] {hyphen-in-label} warning: > >>>> named number `ldp-mp2mp' must not include a hyphen in SMIv2 > >>> > >>> See later question/comments below. > >>> > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:215: [5] {group-unref} warning: current > >> group `l2L3VpnMcastOptionalGroup' is not referenced in this module > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:4: [5] {import-unused} warning: > >>>> identifier > >> `NOTIFICATION-TYPE' imported from module `SNMPv2-SMI' is never used > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:5: [5] {import-unused} warning: > >>>> identifier > >> `Unsigned32' imported from module `SNMPv2-SMI' is never used > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:8: [5] {import-unused} warning: > >>>> identifier > >> `NOTIFICATION-GROUP' imported from module `SNMPv2-CONF' is never > used > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:11: [5] {import-unused} warning: > >>>> identifier > >> `TruthValue' imported from module `SNMPv2-TC' is never used > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:11: [5] {import-unused} warning: > >>>> identifier > >> `RowStatus' imported from module `SNMPv2-TC' is never used > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:12: [5] {import-unused} warning: > >>>> identifier > >> `TimeStamp' imported from module `SNMPv2-TC' is never used > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:12: [5] {import-unused} warning: > >>>> identifier > >> `TimeInterval' imported from module `SNMPv2-TC' is never used > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:15: [5] {import-unused} warning: > >>>> identifier > >> `SnmpAdminString' imported from module `SNMP-FRAMEWORK-MIB' is > never > >> used > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:18: [5] {import-unused} warning: > >>>> identifier > >> `InetAddress' imported from module `INET-ADDRESS-MIB' is never used > >>>> mibs/L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB:18: [5] {import-unused} warning: > >>>> identifier `InetAddressType' imported from module `INET-ADDRESS-MIB' > >>>> is never used > >>> > >>> Removed the above unused imports. > >>> > >>>> > >>>> 5. REFERENCE clauses: Please use REFERENCE clauses liberally. > >>>> Wherever possible, provide references for objects used in > >>>> the MIB. The references will point to specific sections/ > >>>> sub-sections of the RFCs defining the protocol for which the > >>>> MIB is being designed. It will greatly improve the readability > >>>> of the document. > >>> > >>> Added. > >>> > >>>> > >>>> 6. IMPORTS clause > >>>> MIB modules from which items are imported must be cited and > >>>> included in the normative references. > >>>> The conventional style is > >>>> mplsStdMIB > >>>> FROM MPLS-TC-STD-MIB -- > >> [RFC3811] > >>> > >>> Added. > >>> > >>>> > >>>> 7. Please update the MODULE-IDENTITY. (There are no syntantic > >>>> errors.) > >>>> 7.1 CONTACT-INFO > >>>> Following the conventions (including indentation style) will > >>>> improve the readability. (e.g. RFC4382, RFC5132). > >>>> Will be good if it does not overflow into the next page. > >>> > >>> Fixed. > >>> > >>>> > >>>> 7.2 REVISION clause: follow the convention recommended in RFC4181 > >>>> sec 4.5 > >>>> REVISION "200212132358Z" -- December 13, 2002 > >>>> DESCRIPTION "Initial version, published as RFC yyyy." > >>>> -- RFC Ed.: replace yyyy with actual RFC number & remove this note: > >>> > >>> Fixed. > >>> > >>>> 7.3 OID assignment: follow the convention recommended in RFC4181 > >>>> sec 4.5 i > >>>> replace > >>>> ::= { experimental 99 } -- number to be assigned > >>>> by > >>>> ::= { <subtree> XXX } > >>>> -- RFC Ed.: replace XXX with IANA-assigned number & remove this > note > >>>> <subtree> will be the subtree under which the module will be > >>>> registered. > >>>> > >>> > >>> I kept "experimental 99" so that I could continue to use mib tools > >>> to validate; > >> but I added notes for the editor to replace them as you indicated. > >>> > >>>> > >>>> 8. Specific MO and TC related comments. > >>>> L2L3VpnMcastProviderTunnelType ::= TEXTUAL-CONVENTION > >>>> STATUS current > >>>> DESCRIPTION > >>>> "Types of provider tunnels used for multicast in > >>>> BGP/MPLS L2 or IP VPN." > >>>> SYNTAX INTEGER { unconfigured (0), > >>>> rsvp-p2mp (1), > >>>> ldp-p2mp (2), > >>>> pim-asm (3), > >>>> pim-ssm (4), > >>>> pim-bidir (5), > >>>> ingress-replication (6), > >>>> ldp-mp2mp (7) > >>>> > >>>> o Would be nice to align the enumeration labels with the > >>>> labels in the protocol document RFC 6514 unless there is > >>>> a good reason for not doing so. (You will have to take > >>>> care of the smi compilation errors too; '-' is not allowed ). > >>> > >>> Are spaces allowed? I don't know so I used hyphen. For now I replace > >>> with > >> things like rsvpP2mp. > >>> Or could/should I just remove the definitions, so that if a new type > >>> is defined > >> in the future there is no need to update the MIB? > >>> > >>>> > >>>> 8.1 l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelAttributeEntry OBJECT-TYPE > >>>> SYNTAX L2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelAttributeEntry > >>>> MAX-ACCESS not-accessible > >>>> STATUS current > >>>> DESCRIPTION > >>>> "An entry in this table corresponds to an PMSI attribute > >>>> that is advertised/received on this router. > >>>> For BGP-based signaling (for I-PMSI via auto-discovery > >>>> procedure, or for S-PMSI via S-PMSI A-D routes), > >>>> they are just as signaled by BGP (RFC 6514 section 5, > >>>> 'PMSI Tunnel attribute'). > >>>> For UDP-based S-PMSI signaling for PIM-MVPN, > >>>> they're derived from S-PMSI Join Message > >>>> (RFC 6513 section 7.4.2, 'UDP-based Protocol').. > >>>> > >>>> Note that BGP-based signaling may be used for > >>>> PIM-MVPN as well." > >>>> o Fix the ".." in "'UDP-based Protocol').." above. > >>>> o Please give the reference for this Table. > >>>> Is it- "PMSI Tunnel attribute" in RFC 6513 Sec.4 ? > >>>> "PMSI Tunnel attribute" in RFC 6514 Sec.5 ? > >>>> both? > >>>> Any other pointers? > >>> > >>> Fixed. > >>> > >>>> > >>>> 8.2 l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelAttributeFlags OBJECT-TYPE > >>>> SYNTAX OCTET STRING (SIZE (1)) > >>>> MAX-ACCESS not-accessible > >>>> STATUS current > >>>> DESCRIPTION > >>>> "For UDP-based S-PMSI signaling for PIM-MVPN, this is > 0. > >>>> For BGP-based I/S-PMSI signaling, this is the Flags > >>>> field in PMSI Tunnel Attribute of the corresponding > >>>> I/S-PMSI A-D route." > >>>> ::= { l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelAttributeEntry 1 } > >>>> o Please confirm that the above is a complete enumeration of > the > >>>> types of signalling. > >>>> o RFC 6514 Sec.5 says that the Flags field indicates > >>>> "Leaf Information Required". That is useful information. > >>>> Please include in the description. > >>> > >>> The intent is to simply return the octet value of the flags field, > >>> w/o listing > >> individual bits like "Leaf Information Required". More bits could be > >> defined in the future but the MIB would not change. > >>> > >>> Is that OK? > >>> > >>>> > >>>> 8.3 l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelAttributeId OBJECT-TYPE > >>>> SYNTAX OCTET STRING ( SIZE (0..37) ) > >>>> MAX-ACCESS not-accessible > >>>> STATUS current > >>>> DESCRIPTION > >>>> "For UDP-based S-PMSI signaling for PIM-MVPN, the > first > >>>> four or sixteen octets of this attribute are filled with > >>>> the provider tunnel group address (IPv4 or IPv6).. > >>>> For BGP-based I/S-PMSI signaling, this is the Tunnel > >> Identifier > >>>> Field in PMSI Tunnel Attribute of the corresponding > >> I/S-PMSI > >>>> A-D route." > >>>> o Check the size specifications. The specs above say it can be > >>>> all sizes 0..37. That is not clear from the DESCRIPTION clause. > >>>> o Fix the ".." in "(IPv4 or IPv6).." above. > >>>> o RFC 6514 Sec 5. PMSI Tunnel Attribute gives the Tunnel > Identifiers > >>>> for mLDP, PIM-SM, PIM-SSM, BIDIR-PIM,Ingress > >> Replication,MP2MP. > >>>> It appears that the sizes (range) for each case will be different. > >>>> Please clarify that, and if there are discrete sizes, specify > >>>> accordingly. > >>> > >>> Depending on the tunnel type, there could be different sizes. Future > >>> tunnel > >> types could have other sizes that not specified today. I was thinking > >> to just give a size range so that it is flexible. Is that ok? > >>> > >>>> > >>>> > >>>> 8.3 l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelPointer OBJECT-TYPE > >>>> SYNTAX RowPointer > >>>> MAX-ACCESS read-only > >>>> STATUS current > >>>> DESCRIPTION > >>>> "If the tunnel exists in some MIB table, this is the > >>>> row pointer to it." > >>>> o "some MIB table" : specify which MIB table. > >>> > >>> I can give an example, like mplsTunnelTable [RFC 3812]. It could be > >>> whatever > >> table that a tunnel may be put into. > >>> > >>>> o In what case will the tunnel exist and in what case will it not? > >>> > >>> If a device supports mplsTunnelTable and the tunnel is represented > >>> there, > >> then it exists. > >>> > >>>> o What will be the behaviour if the above condition is not satisfied? > >>> > >>> A null pointer should be given. > >>> > >>>> > >>>> 8.4 l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelIf OBJECT-TYPE > >>>> SYNTAX RowPointer > >>>> MAX-ACCESS read-only > >>>> STATUS current > >>>> DESCRIPTION > >>>> "If the tunnel has a corresponding interface, this is the > >>>> row pointer to the ifName table." > >>>> o DESCRIPTION looks incorrect. Please fix it. Do you want to say > >>>> this object points to the corresponding row in the ifTable? > >>> > >>> Yes. Fixed. > >>> > >>>> o In what case does the TunnelIf exist and in what case will it not? > >>> > >>> Some tunnels may not have a corresponding interface. > >>> > >>>> o What will be expected if the tunnel does not have a > corresponding > >>>> interface? > >>> > >>> Null row pointer. > >>> > >>>> > >>>> 9. The Security Considerations section does not follow the Security > >>>> Guidelines for IETF MIB Modules > >>>> http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/ops/trac/wiki/mib-security. > >>>> Please fix. > >>> > >>> I was really hoping that it would not have to be that tedious. > >>> SNMP/MIB > >> security should be no different from the CLI security - once you > >> secure the infrastructure then what's more to do? > >>> > >>> I'll need more time to work on this. Let me try to address the > >>> issues in the > >> other mib first and come back to this. > >>> > >>>> > >>>> > >>>> 10.ID-nits > >>>> 10.1 Checking nits according to http://www.ietf.org/id-info/checklist : > >>>> > >>>> ------------------------------------------------------------------- > >>>> -- > >>>> ------ > >>>> > >>>> ** There are 4 instances of too long lines in the document, > >>>> the > >> longest one > >>>> being 3 characters in excess of 72. > >>> > >>> I fixed some but there still three too long lines: > >>> > >>> l2L3VpnMcastPmsiTunnelAttributeType > >>> L2L3VpnMcastProviderTunnelType, > >>> > >>> l2L3VpnMcastGroups OBJECT IDENTIFIER ::= > >> {l2L3VpnMcastConformance 1} > >>> l2L3VpnMcastCompliances OBJECT IDENTIFIER ::= > >>> {l2L3VpnMcastConformance 2} > >>> > >>> Should I break them into different lines or just keep them as is? > >>> Any example > >> of expected indentation if I break the lines? > >>> > >>>> > >>>> 10.2 Checking references for intended status: Proposed Standard > >>>> > >>>> ------------------------------------------------------------------- > >>>> -- > >>>> ------ > >>>> > >>>> == Missing Reference: 'RFC 7117' is mentioned on line 76, but not > >>>> defined > >>>> 'described in [RFC6513, RFC6514, RFC 7117] and other > >> documents tha...' > >>> > >>> I hope I understood and fixed it (removing the space in "RFC 7117"). > >>> > >>>> > >>>> 11. There is another WIP MVPN-MIB in draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-mib-02.txt > >>>> MVPN-MIB has objects that refer to L2L3-VPN-MCAST-MIB. > >>>> Is there a good reason for not merging the 2 documents? I > >>>> have not > >> seen > >>>> any discussion or explanation on this. I may have missed it. Please > >>>> clarify or, give some pointers. > >>> > >>> As mentioned in the introduction: > >>> > >>> this memo describes managed objects common to both VPLS > >>> Multicast [RFC7117] and MVPN [RFC6513, RFC6514]. > >>> > >>> MVPN-MIB is for MVPN. There was another VPLS Multicast MIB in the > >>> work > >> and both would reference common objects defined in this MIB. > >>> > >>> Thanks! > >>> Jeffrey > >>> > >>>> -----Original Message----- > >>>> From: BESS [mailto:bess-bounces@ietf.org] On Behalf Of Glenn > >>>> Mansfield Keeni > >>>> Sent: Tuesday, April 12, 2016 2:28 AM > >>>> To: Benoit Claise <bclaise@cisco.com>; EXT - > >>>> thomas.morin@orange.com <thomas.morin@orange.com> > >>>> Cc: Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang <zzhang@juniper.net>; ops-ads@ietf.org; > >>>> Martin Vigoureux <martin.vigoureux@nokia.com>; bess@ietf.org; Mach > >>>> Chen <mach.chen@huawei.com> > >>>> Subject: [bess] MIBDoc review of > >>>> draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib-02.txt > >>>> > >>>> Hi, > >>>> I have been asked to do a MIB Doctors review of > >>>> draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-mcast-mib-02.txt. > >>>> My knowledge of L2L3VPN Multicast is limited to the reading of this > >>>> document and browsing through the documents referred to in the > >>>> draft and bess-wg mailing list archives.( read "shallow"). > >>>> So some of the doubts and questions may sound trivial or strange. > >>>> Please bear with me and help me help you make this into a better > >>>> document :-) > >>>> > >>>> The comments are attached. > >>>> > >>>> Glenn > >>>> > >>> > >>> _______________________________________________ > >>> BESS mailing list > >>> BESS@ietf.org > >>> https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/bess > >>> > > > >
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Hiroshi Tsunoda
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-mib-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-… Mach Chen
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Mach Chen
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Mach Chen
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Mach Chen
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-… Mach Chen
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-… Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang
- [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Benoit Claise
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Hiroshi Tsunoda
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Hiroshi Tsunoda
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Hiroshi Tsunoda
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Hiroshi Tsunoda
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-… Hiroshi Tsunoda
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Hiroshi Tsunoda
- [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-vpn-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Hiroshi Tsunoda
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Hiroshi Tsunoda
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-… thomas.morin
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-… Hiroshi Tsunoda
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-… thomas.morin
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Hiroshi Tsunoda
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-… Hiroshi Tsunoda
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Hiroshi Tsunoda
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-… Hiroshi Tsunoda
- Re: [bess] MIBDoc review of draft-ietf-bess-l2l3-… Glenn Mansfield Keeni