Re: [bess] comments on draft-ietf-bess-evpn-bum-procedure-updates-06

"Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang" <zzhang@juniper.net> Fri, 09 August 2019 11:23 UTC

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Hi Sandy,

Thanks for your review and comments. I have submitted -07 revision.

Please see zzh> below.

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Subject: [bess] comments on draft-ietf-bess-evpn-bum-procedure-updates-06


Hi authors,



I read this version and have some comments.



Thanks,

Sandy

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  1.  In section 6.1, since the example is about AS, if it is better to change the title of this section to "AS/Area va. Region" ?

Zzh> Changed.

  1.  In section 6.2, the last sentence of the fourth paragrah, if it should be "there is no per-region S-PMSI aggregation routes"?

Zzh> "Per-region" itself already means aggregation.

  1.  In section 6.2, if it is better to add some detail description for area ID EC construction?

Zzh> Added.

  1.  In section 6.3, if it is better to add some detail description for Route Target construction?

Zzh> Added.

5. The following is the idnits result:

Zzh> Addressed.

Zzh> Thanks!

Zzh> Jeffrey

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