[bess] Re: Genart early review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-mh-split-horizon-08

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From: "Jorge Rabadan (Nokia)" <jorge.rabadan@nokia.com>
To: Jouni Korhonen <jounikor@gmail.com>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Hi Jouni,

Thanks very much for reviewing.
I moved forward the terminology section as you suggested and went through the acronyms.

Version 09 addresses your comments.
Thanks!
Jorge

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Reviewer: Jouni Korhonen
Review result: Ready with Nits

I am an assigned GEN-ART directorate reviewer for
draft-ietf-bess-evpn-mh-split-horizon-08.

Summary: Ready with nits

Overall I found the document ready for publication. I have not followed the
topic thus I abstain myself from technical commentary.

Editorial nits:
1) In Section 1.1 Introduction the acronyms are used without a) expanding them
on the first use and/or b) before Section 1.2 Conventions and Terminology. Take
ES, ESI, AC, BUM, A-D as examples. Expand and/or rearrange sections. 2)  Some
acronyms are not expanded at all in the document. I admit most are common &
known within MPLS etc genres but still.. Take PE as an example. 3) No acronym
introduction is Section name (i.e. Section 2.1)