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[bfcpbis] WGLC comments on draft-ietf-bfcpbis-rfc4583bis-17

"Charles Eckel (eckelcu)" <eckelcu@cisco.com> Mon, 17 July 2017 11:23 UTC

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From: "Charles Eckel (eckelcu)" <eckelcu@cisco.com>
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Subject: [bfcpbis] WGLC comments on draft-ietf-bfcpbis-rfc4583bis-17
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(as an individual)

I have reviewed the draft. I do not have any technical or major issues with it.
I do have some editorial comments and suggestions.

Globally
Use reestablish or re-establish but not both.

Pg 1. 
s/ Changes from RFC 4583 are summarized in Section 14/ Changes from RFC 4583 are summarized in Section 15

Pg 4.
s/ both the offerer and the answerer act/ both endpoints act

Pg 6.
s/ When this attribute appears in an answer, it only carries one role/ When a “floorctrl” attribute appears in an answer, it MUST include one and only role

Pg 9.
s/ the answerer which may be the client or the floorcontrol server acts/ the answerer, which may be the client or the floorcontrol server, acts

Pg 10.
s/ same BFCP session and DTLS associations/ same BFCP session and DTLS association

Pg 11.
s/ the SDP 'fingerprint' attribute [7], if the endpoint supports, and is willing to use, a cipher suite with an associated certificate./ the SDP 'fingerprint' attribute [10].

Pg 14.
s/ If the BFCP connection is carried on top of TCP, and unless the offerer wants to re-establish an existing TCP connection, the offerer MUST associate an SDP connection attribute, with an 'existing' value, with the 'm' line/ If the BFCP connection is carried on top of TCP and the offerer does not want to re-establish an existing TCP connection, the offerer MUST associate an SDP connection attribute with an 'existing' value with the 'm' line

Cheers,
Charles

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