Re: [Bier] Shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bier-bar-ipa
Greg Mirsky <gregimirsky@gmail.com> Mon, 21 September 2020 01:03 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Bier] Shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bier-bar-ipa
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Hi All, would like to thank Authors for promptly responding to the IPR poll. The result - no IPR reported. Looking forward to your response to my comments and the publication of the updated version. Regards, Greg M (as the Shepherd) On Wed, Sep 9, 2020 at 9:56 AM Greg Mirsky <gregimirsky@gmail.com> wrote: > Dear WG Chairs, > we're waiting for one author to respond to the IPR poll on the draft. > > Dear Authors, > thank you for the well-written document. The proposed solution is elegant > and presented clearly. I have several comments and questions. Also a number > of nits that may be worth your attention. First, comments and questions: > > - In Section 2 the requirement to provision BAR and IPA values uses > SHOULD: > > For a particular sub-domain, all routers SHOULD be provisioned with > and signal the same BAR and IPA values. > > Do you think that the MUST is more suitable and would not require a change > of the text that follows? > > > - Could the following benefit from the use of the normative language? > > It is expected that both the BAR and IPA values could have both > algorithm and constraints semantics. > From the text that follows, it seems that both semantics are required for > a router to calculate the underlay path. Is that correct? Also, is there a > default value of a semantic? If that is the case, it would be helpful to > state that explicitly. > > > - There is a pair of requirements in Section 2: > > When a new BAR value is defined, its corresponding BC/BA semantics > MUST be specified. For a new IGP Algorithm to be used as a BIER IPA, > its RC/RA semantics MUST also be clear. > The last sentence can benefit from mode details of what is required to > make RC/RA semantics clear. Would s/clear/clearly specified/ be acceptable? > > Nits: > > - AFAIK, references are not used in an abstract text, instead > reference an RFC as text, e.g., "RFC 8444 and RFC 8401". > - rules for introducing abbreviations (Section 3.6 RFC 7322 > <https://tools.ietf.org/html/rfc7322#section-3.6>) explain that: > > Abbreviations should be expanded in document titles and upon first > use in the document. The full expansion of the text should be > followed by the abbreviation itself in parentheses. > > Several cases, e.g., BAR and IPA, don't follow that rule. > > > - BFR (Section 2) needs expansion on the first use. > - s/a IPA/an IPA/ > - s/a RCRA/an RCRA/ > - s/with semantics/ with the semantics/ > - s/are augmented/is augmented/ > - s/secuity/security/ > - s/thanks/thank/ > > > Regards, > Greg > >
- [Bier] Shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bier-bar-i… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [Bier] Shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bier-b… Greg Shepherd
- Re: [Bier] Shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bier-b… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [Bier] Shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bier-b… Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang
- Re: [Bier] Shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bier-b… Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang
- Re: [Bier] Shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bier-b… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [Bier] Shepherd's review of draft-ietf-bier-b… Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang