Re: [BLISS] Status of draft-ietf-bliss-call-completion-10

[Shida Schubert <[e-mail]>]

[ As a chair ]

Authors updated the draft reflecting Dale's comments.

 Please see the changes to make sure there is no further issues. 

 If there isn't I will get the author to post their draft and write up the 
proto-writeup based on the version 11 referenced here. 

 If you believe we need to further discuss the draft please let your 
voice heard by posting your opinion within a week. 

 http://bliss-ietf.org/drafts/draft-ietf-bliss-call-completion-11.txt
 http://bliss-ietf.org/drafts/diff_10_11.html

 Regards
  Shida

On Sep 2, 2011, at 3:53 AM, Worley, Dale R (Dale) wrote:

>> From: Shida Schubert [[e-mail]]
>> 
>> I did a thorough review of the draft before submitting
>> to the IESG and I sent the following comments along
>> with a draft with my suggested edits (all nits).
> 
> A lot of improvements!
> 
> But I think the last paragraph of section 6.2 has some minor edit
> mistakes which damage the grammar:
> 
>   If the caller's agent becomes unwilling ??? no longer wants to initiate
>   the CC call (e.g., because the calling user???caller has deactivated
>   CC), the caller's agent terminates the subscription in accordance
>   with [RFC3265] or suspends the subscription(s) as specified in
>   subclause 6.5.
> 
> And in section 6.6, this sentence is missing a phrase:
> 
>    Note that the caller's agent's policy about resumption may
>    be manually initiated and thus should not be automatically resumed.
> 
> Perhaps,
> 
>    Note that the caller's agent's policy about resumption may be
>>>> that it must be<<< manually initiated and thus should not be
>    automatically resumed.
> 
> Looks good!
> 
> Dale