Re: [bmwg] Fwd: New Version Notification for draft-vassilev-bmwg-network-interconnect-tester-02.txt

Vladimir

A quick look suggests some editing is needed.

line length exceeds that permitted for an RFC in the YANG tree diagram -
in practical terms, this means the presentation on my screen is a mess.

reference to BCP 14 is out of date

1.1.2.  Tree Diagram
"included in  this draft, "
Think positive and assume it will always be a draft - suggest
'in this document'

YANG import statements lack references

    reference       "RFC XXXX: Network Interconnect Tester";
this is not quite the same as the title of the I-D - should be the same
IMHO

need more references for the leaf or grouping;
you have
      "IEEE 802-2014 Clause 9.2";
which then needs to be in the I-D Normative References while
 802.1q
needs to be a reference and in the I-D references and I think is the
wrong document for VLAN i.e. replaced by a later IEEE one; this came up
recently in an IETF Last Call

802.1p
likewise.

8.  Security Considerations
requires the boiler plate from YANG Guidelines

Normative References
you need about a dozen more which make it much easier to review!

I realise that these are non-technical issues but I find it fruitful to
start with these and form an opinion of the I-D first, and then look at
technical ones.

Tom Petch

----- Original Message -----
From: "Vladimir Vassilev" <vladimir@lightside-instruments.com>
To: <bmwg@ietf.org>
Cc: <bmwg-chairs@ietf.org>
Sent: Friday, October 25, 2019 3:02 PM

> Hi,
>
> I would like to make the following presentation request for the IETF
106
> bmwg session:
>
>   - name of the drafts:
draft-vassilev-bmwg-network-interconnect-tester-02
>   - name of presentation: A YANG Data Model for Network Interconnect
> Tester Management
>   - name of the presenter(s): Vladimir Vassilev
>   - desired time request (in minutes): 10-15 min
>   - local or remote: local
>
> Early reviews of the draft and feedback on the mailing list is
welcome.
>
> In addition to the presentation I have added a hackathon project
"BMWG -
> Implement RFC2544 for NETCONF/YANG managed tester and DUT"
>
> Expected result: Standalone command line application written in Python
> connecting directly to the DUT and the tester over NETCONF executing
the
> RFC2544 test and reporting the results.
>
> I am bringing a prototype FPGA based hardware implementing the
> NETCONF/YANG interface published in the draft which has more
> deterministic behavior then the software implementation completed
during
> the last hackathon.
>
> Anyone interested in this work is welcome to join the team.
>
> Vladimir
>
> -------- Forwarded Message --------
> Subject: New Version Notification for
> draft-vassilev-bmwg-network-interconnect-tester-02.txt
> Date: Tue, 08 Oct 2019 05:17:47 -0700
> From: internet-drafts@ietf.org
> To: Vladimir Vassilev <vladimir@lightside-instruments.com>
>
>
>
>
> A new version of I-D,
draft-vassilev-bmwg-network-interconnect-tester-02.txt
> has been successfully submitted by Vladimir Vassilev and posted to the
> IETF repository.
>
> Name: draft-vassilev-bmwg-network-interconnect-tester
> Revision: 02
> Title: A YANG Data Model for Network Interconnect Tester Management
> Document date: 2019-10-08
> Group: Individual Submission
> Pages: 25
> URL:
>
https://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-vassilev-bmwg-network-interco
nnect-tester-02.txt
> Status:
>
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-vassilev-bmwg-network-interconnec
t-tester/
> Htmlized:
>
https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-vassilev-bmwg-network-interconnect-tes
ter-02
> Htmlized:
>
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-vassilev-bmwg-network-interc
onnect-tester
> Diff:
>
https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-vassilev-bmwg-network-interconne
ct-tester-02
>
> Abstract:
> This document introduces new YANG model for use in network
> interconnect testing containing modules for traffic generator and
> traffic analyzer.
>
>
>
> Please note that it may take a couple of minutes from the time of
submission
> until the htmlized version and diff are available at tools.ietf.org.
>
> The IETF Secretariat
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