[bmwg] Adam Roach's No Objection on draft-ietf-bmwg-dcbench-terminology-17: (with COMMENT)
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Subject: [bmwg] Adam Roach's No Objection on draft-ietf-bmwg-dcbench-terminology-17: (with COMMENT)
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Adam Roach has entered the following ballot position for draft-ietf-bmwg-dcbench-terminology-17: No Objection When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this introductory paragraph, however.) Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/iesg/statement/discuss-criteria.html for more information about IESG DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-bmwg-dcbench-terminology/ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- COMMENT: ---------------------------------------------------------------------- I am surprised to find normative statements in a terminology document. It might be appropriate -- if awkward -- to say things like "this term MUST mean x," but this document includes statements pertaining specifically to what "MUST be measured," which seems well beyond its purported scope. I would suggest either removing all such statements, or clearly expanding the scope of the document (including, and quite importantly, revising its title). Editorial: - The first paragraph of Section 6.1 uses plural forms for B, kB, and MB, but singular for GB. Please make these consistent. - Typically, data units are capitalized per SI-system prefix rules, which would make "kB" the correct abbreviation for kilobytes, rather than "KB." - Something has gone well and truly bonkers with the references section formatting. - Please fix reference [1] so that it correctly points to draft-ietf-bmwg-dcbench-methodology. This will ensure that it is updated to the correct RFC value at publication. Please expand the following acronyms upon first use; see https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/abbrev.expansion.txt for guidance. - FPGA - Field-Programmable Gate Array - LLDP - Link Layer Discovery Protocol Nits: ** The abstract seems to contain references ([1]), which it shouldn't. Please replace those with straight textual mentions of the documents in question. == Missing Reference: 'RFC5481' is mentioned on line 285, but not defined == Unused Reference: 'RFC5841' is defined on line 732, but no explicit reference was found in the text ** Obsolete normative reference: RFC 2554 (ref. 'RFC2544') (Obsoleted by RFC 4954)
- [bmwg] Adam Roach's No Objection on draft-ietf-bm… Adam Roach
- Re: [bmwg] Adam Roach's No Objection on draft-iet… Jacob Rapp
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