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Re: [C430] RFC 9000 - Re: [IANA #1196209] Protocol Action: 'QUIC: A UDP-Based Multiplexed and Secure Transport' to Proposed Standard (draft-ietf-quic-transport-34.txt)

Jana Iyengar <jri.ietf@gmail.com> Wed, 26 May 2021 01:34 UTC

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From: Jana Iyengar <jri.ietf@gmail.com>
Date: Tue, 25 May 2021 18:34:23 -0700
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To: Lynne Bartholomew <lbartholomew@amsl.com>
Cc: Martin Thomson via C430 <c430@rfc-editor.org>
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Thanks for the catch, Lynne!

I agree with Martin, except for the last two corrections. There are
3 fields (ECT0 Count, ECT1 Count, ECN-CE Count), grouped together in the
text as the ECN counts. I don't think we should say ECN Counts field, since
that isn't actually a field... we can say "ECN counts" or "ECN counts
fields", but not "ECN Counts field".

>> 2.  In Section 19.3.2:  ... ECN Counts are only present ...
> >
> > Instead:
> > The ECN Counts field is only present ...
>

I propose changing this to "ECN counts are"

>> 3.  Just after Figure 27:  The three ECN Counts are: ...
> >
> > Instead:
> > The three fields in ECN Counts are: ...
>

I would propose here "The three ECN counts fields are: ..."
I'm fine with "The three ECN counts are: ..." as well, but I think "fields"
is appropriate here.

Martin -- WDYT?

- jana

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