Re: [CCAMP] FW: I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-mw-yang-03.txt

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Subject: Re: [CCAMP] FW: I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-mw-yang-03.txt
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Jonas

Some administrative thoughts on the YANG in  this I-D, most applying to
both YANG modules.

The contact list has  i-d draft authors; suggest editors

The description clause copyright statement is incomplete.

The description clause lacks a statement as to which RFC this comes
from.

The revision should say 'Initial revision'

Add an RFC editor note to replace the dates (plural)

The case of xxxx varies; suggest making it XXXX and adding note to the
RFC Editor to replace <all> occurrences thereof.  Some in the YANG
module might get missed (and some authors use xxxx to mean one thing and
XXXX for something else:-).

import ietf-interface-protection
add a reference; in the RFC it may be obvious where this can be found
but when the YANG module is extracted and on its own, there will be
hundreds of potential RFC to choose from

import iana-if-type
Again I would add a reference - I know, it is well known but I am  fan
of stating the obvious in a technical document

 import ietf-yang-types
ditto

You reference rfc7223bis
Suggest adding a note to the RFC Editor to replace this with the number
assigned to that when it becomes an RFC; the RFC Editor has asked for
such a note.

ETSI References need more work.  The YANG module has references to
 ETSI TR 102 311
 ETSI EN 302 217-1
 ETSI EN 301 129
all of which should appear in the Normative References of the I-D and
none of which do; and they then need to appear in the text part of the
I-D lest they are flagged as unused references

You do have
EN 302 217-2 [EN302217-2]
but that is a different version:-)

And there is a general problem; the reference clause uses ETSI EN 302
217-1 whereas the existing Reference for EN302217-2 drops the ETSI and
drops the spaces; obviously the same?  May be.

So I think you should include a paragraph, or table, perhaps as Section
4.1 saying something like

"   This module imports typedefs from [RFC6991] and
   [RFC7223bis], ....

 and it references

 ETSI TR 102 311  [TR102311]
 ETSI EN 302 217-1 [EN302217-1]
 ETSI EN 301 129 [EN301129]    "
which is the sort of thing that
draft-ietf-netmod-rfc7277bis
does.

reference "ITU-T G.826";
reference "ITU-T Rec. G.808.1";
ditto
(and perhaps making the style the same, with or without Rec., even
spelling it out )

 Tom Petch

----- Original Message -----
From: "Jonas Ahlberg" <jonas.ahlberg@ericsson.com>
To: <ccamp@ietf.org>
Sent: Monday, February 26, 2018 1:35 PM

> Dear CCAMPers,
>
> The draft of the YANG Data Model for Microwave Radio Link has now been
updated.
> The structure, format and content of the document have been changed to
adhere to "Guidelines for Authors and Reviewers of YANG Data Model
Documents", draft-ietf-netmod-rfc6087bis-15.
> A few editorial changes of the actual yang models have also been done,
but the structure and content remains however the same.
>
> In all, the authors believe the draft addresses all the comments and
would like to ask for WG LC.
>
> BR,
> JonasA (on behalf of the co-authors)
>
>
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: CCAMP [mailto:ccamp-bounces@ietf.org] On Behalf Of
internet-drafts@ietf.org
> Sent: den 26 februari 2018 14:23
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> Subject: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-mw-yang-03.txt
>
>
> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts
directories.
> This draft is a work item of the Common Control and Measurement Plane
WG of the IETF.
>
>         Title           : A YANG Data Model for Microwave Radio Link
>         Authors         : Jonas Ahlberg
>                           Ye Min
>                           Xi Li
>                           Daniela Spreafico
>                           Marko Vaupotic
> Filename        : draft-ietf-ccamp-mw-yang-03.txt
> Pages           : 44
> Date            : 2018-02-26
>
> Abstract:
>    This document defines a YANG data model for control and management
>    of the radio link interfaces, and their connectivity to packet
>    (typically Ethernet) interfaces in a microwave/millimeter wave
node.
>    The data nodes for management of the interface protection
>    functionality is broken out into a separate and generic YANG data
>    model in order to make it available also for other interface types.
>
>
> The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-ccamp-mw-yang/
>
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