Re: [CCAMP] 答复: WG Last Call comments on draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-g709-framework-09
Lou Berger <lberger@labn.net> Tue, 13 November 2012 13:56 UTC
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Subject: Re: [CCAMP] 答复: WG Last Call comments on draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-g709-framework-09
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Fatai, Authors, Thank you for the update. Please see below for specific responses. On 11/13/2012 1:32 AM, Fatai Zhang wrote: > Hi Lou and all, > > A new version has been submitted with the udpates based on the comments from Lou. > > Please see more in-line below marked with [Fatai]. > > > Best Regards > > Fatai > > > -----邮件原件----- > 发件人: ccamp-bounces@ietf.org [mailto:ccamp-bounces@ietf.org] 代表 Lou Berger > 发送时间: 2012年10月20日 7:06 > 收件人: CCAMP; draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-g709-framework@tools.ietf.org > 主题: [CCAMP] WG Last Call comments on draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-g709-framework-09 > > Authors, > I have the following LC comments: > > > General comment: > - I have a comment related to the info document, that I'll cover in a > separate mail on the info-model document . > > - I found appendix A to not be very informative and thing there are > better examples in the other documents, suggest either moving one ore > more to this document or drop the appendix. > > [Fatai] The appendix has been dropped, because we think it is better to keep the examples in the other documents. > Okay. You might want to have a reference to examples in other documents where appropriate. > The remaining comments are editorial in nature > > - Please verify that abbreviations are defined before being used . > There are a number of these. > > [Fatai] Checked and updated. great. > > - Please use a consistent decimal representation (sometimes commas are > used other times periods) > > [Fatai] Checked and commas are used. okay. > > - the references [G709-v1] and [G709-v3] each actually refer to multiple > documents, each documented needs to have it's own (correct) reference, > i.g., [G709-v1] and [G709-v1a1]. The document text will need to be > revisited to ensure the proper reference is made. > > [Fatai] [G709-V3A2] is introduced and referenced in the right place. It looks like v1 still has this issue. > - > http://tools.ietf.org/idnits?url=http://tools.ietf.org/id/draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-g709-framework-09.txt > shows there are unresolved nits that need to resolved . I'm using line > numbers from this url in my subsequent comments. In your next update, please resolve the nits as reported in http://tools.ietf.org/idnits?url=http://tools.ietf.org/id/draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-g709-framework-10.txt The rest looks good. Much thanks, Lou > > - Line 46: How about replace "as consented in October 2009" with "as > published in 2009." > > [Fatai] Accepted. > > - Line 255: Drop "approved in 2009" the reference is sufficient > > [Fatai] Accepted. > > - Line 260: suggest the following change: > OLD > 2.5Gb/s 1.25Gb/s Nominal Bit rate > NEW > Time Slot Granularity > 2.5Gb/s 1.25Gb/s Nominal Bit rate > > [Fatai] Accepted. > > - Lines 272-274: Please add the appropriate reference to G.709 section > or table that points to where one finds the information on determining > actual bit rate. > > [Fatai] Accepted. > > - Line 307: suggest changing "into the OTUk" --> "into a specific OTUk" > > [Fatai] Accepted. > > - Line 340/1: need a reference to where this is defined. > > [Fatai] Accepted and added. > > - Line 346-347: Need a reference to where this behavior is defined. > > [Fatai] Accepted and added. > > - Lines 387/388. Isn't this sentence OBE and should be dropped? > > [Fatai] Accepted. > > - Page 11, RWA is used in a few places on this page as is OCh layer, > suggest replacing all instances of RWA with OCH or "OCh layer". > > [Fatai] Accepted. > > - Line 500: what do you mean by "including OCh layer visibility."? this > isn't really reflected in the solutions documents (other than as MLN). > > [Fatai] Deleted to avoid ambiguity. > > - Line 589: replace "New label" with "A new label format" > > [Fatai] Accepted. > > - Line 636: replace "some" with "sufficient" > > [Fatai] Accepted. > > - Lines 639-641: drop lines (seems redundant with following paragraph) > > [Fatai] Accepted and dropped. > > - Line 686: your usage of "just" is a bit odd, how about replace "be > just switched" with "restricted to switching" > > [Fatai] Accepted. > > - Line 688: similarly how about replace "just terminated" to "restricted > to termination" > > [Fatai] Accepted. > > - lines 714-719, probably should have a reference to [rfc4201] > > [Fatai] Accepted. > > - Line 879: Replace "contrary" with "opposite" or "reverse" > > [Fatai] Accepted. > > - Line 888. I suggest adding "Although, this is not greater than the > risks presented by the existing OTN control plane as defined by > [RFC4203] and [RFC4328]." > > [Fatai] Accepted. > > - Lines 888-890, I suggest dropping the sentence starting with "The data > plane technology..." for multiple reasons, not least of which is that > the ITU-T owns the data plane so the comment is completely out of scope. > > [Fatai] Accepted. > > - Lines 1081/2: The whole document is non-normative, so just drop this > sentence. > > [Fatai] Accepted. > > That's it on this document. > > Lou > > On 10/8/2012 4:47 PM, Lou Berger wrote: >> This mail begins a two week working group last call on: >> >> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-g709-framework-09 >> (Informational) >> >> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-g709-info-model-04 >> (Informational) >> >> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-ospf-g709v3-03 >> (Standards Track) >> >> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-signaling-g709v3-04 >> (Standards Track) >> >> This working group last call ends on October 22. Comments should be >> sent to the CCAMP mailing list. Please remember to include the >> technical basis for any comments. >> >> Please note that we're still missing a few IPR statements, and look >> for these to come in during the LC period. Any forthcoming publication >> request will be delayed by late IPR statements/disclosures. >> >> Thank you, >> Lou (and Deborah) >> _______________________________________________ >> CCAMP mailing list >> CCAMP@ietf.org >> https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ccamp >> >> >> >> > _______________________________________________ > CCAMP mailing list > CCAMP@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ccamp >
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