[CCAMP] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration-fwk-12
"Black, David" <david.black@emc.com> Thu, 16 January 2014 23:30 UTC
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From: "Black, David" <david.black@emc.com>
To: "General Area Review Team (gen-art@ietf.org)" <gen-art@ietf.org>, "attila.takacs@ericsson.com" <attila.takacs@ericsson.com>, "hejia@huawei.com" <hejia@huawei.com>, "don.fedyk@gmail.com" <don.fedyk@gmail.com>
Date: Thu, 16 Jan 2014 18:30:09 -0500
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Subject: [CCAMP] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration-fwk-12
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The -12 version of this draft addresses the nits and editorial items noted in the Gen-ART review of the -11 version. It's ready for RFC publication. Thanks, --David > -----Original Message----- > From: Gen-art [mailto:gen-art-bounces@ietf.org] On Behalf Of Black, David > Sent: Sunday, December 29, 2013 9:51 PM > To: General Area Review Team (gen-art@ietf.org); attila.takacs@ericsson.com; > donald.fedyk@alcatel-lucent.com; hejia@huawei.com > Cc: adrian@olddog.co.uk; ccamp@ietf.org; ietf@ietf.org > Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration- > fwk-11 > > One additional nit - Don Fedyk's email address listed in the draft does not > work. > > Thanks, > --David > > > -----Original Message----- > > From: Black, David > > Sent: Sunday, December 29, 2013 9:46 PM > > To: General Area Review Team (gen-art@ietf.org); attila.takacs@ericsson.com; > > donald.fedyk@alcatel-lucent.com; hejia@huawei.com > > Cc: Black, David; adrian@olddog.co.uk; ccamp@ietf.org; ietf@ietf.org > > Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration-fwk-11 > > > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > > > > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > > you may receive. > > > > Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-oam-configuration-fwk-11 > > Reviewer: David L. Black > > Review Date: December 29, 2013 > > IETF LC End Date: January 5, 2014 > > > > Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that > > should be fixed before publication. > > > > This draft describes the GMPLS framework for signaling OAM configuration, > > and specifies additional RSVP elements to support that signaling. Knowledge > > of RSVP, and specifically RSVP-TE is assumed; beyond that, the draft is > > complete, although it is very detailed - see editorial comment below on > > Section 3. > > > > Nits/editorial comments: > > > > Sections 3.1-3.3 dive into the details very quickly. They would be easier > to > > understand if there was an overview paragraph near the start of Section 3 > that > > describes the roles of the two ADMIN_STATUS flags and the two LSP Attributes > > flags in OAM configuration (establishment, change/adjustment, deletion) > before > > the current text that contains the details of RSVP message processing. > > > > There are a number of instances of "(IANA to assign)" in section 4 that the > > RFC Editor will need to remove - an RFC Editor note to that effect should > > be inserted at the start of Section 4. > > > > Section 4.5 is necessarily incomplete on P2MP considerations, because (as > > it says) "P2MP OAM mechanisms are very specific to the data plane > technology". > > It would be helpful if section 4.5 contained language indicating what a > > specific data plane specification should include to completely specify > > P2MP OAM configuration for that data plane. > > > > idnits 2.13.01 didn't find anything that needs attention. > > > > Thanks, > > --David > > ---------------------------------------------------- > > David L. Black, Distinguished Engineer > > EMC Corporation, 176 South St., Hopkinton, MA 01748 > > +1 (508) 293-7953 FAX: +1 (508) 293-7786 > > david.black@emc.com Mobile: +1 (978) 394-7754 > > ---------------------------------------------------- > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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