[CCAMP] Comments on draft-sharma-ccamp-otn-service-model (Re: I-D Action: draft-sharma-ccamp-otn-service-model-00.txt)

Yuji Tochio <tochio@jp.fujitsu.com> Wed, 20 July 2016 09:28 UTC

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Subject: [CCAMP] Comments on draft-sharma-ccamp-otn-service-model (Re: I-D Action: draft-sharma-ccamp-otn-service-model-00.txt)
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Dear authors and all

I have read your draft and I think it is a good starting point in CCAMP but have
some comments.
So I would like to address my comments on draft-sharma-ccamp-otn-service-model.
They are about referencing issue in general.

1)
This draft refers to ITU-T G.709 (2012). The latest G.709 is now approved and  ODUCn is
included in 2016 version.
If you would like to include ODUCn, then you should refer to G.709(2016).
But it is noted that G.709 (2016) does not use LO/HO ODU  but uses server/client ODU.

2)
A number of non-standard clients are defined., like ODU1e, ODU2f, ODU3e1, ODU3e2....
This draft repeats the issue found in draft-ietf-ccamp-additional-signal-type-g709v3
before being WG draft.

Your draft is presented as "Intended status: Standards Track", it should be careful
in the choice of Intended status.

Regards,
Yuji

ps
I had sent the comments to authors in advance but forgot sending to list per Xian's request.

On 2016/07/07 7:11, internet-drafts@ietf.org wrote:
> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts directories.
>
>
>          Title           : OTN Service YANG Model
>          Authors         : Anurag Sharma
>                            Rajan Rao
>                            Xian Zhang
> 	Filename        : draft-sharma-ccamp-otn-service-model-00.txt
> 	Pages           : 19
> 	Date            : 2016-07-06
>
> Abstract:
>     This document describes the YANG data model for OTN Services.
>
>
> The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-sharma-ccamp-otn-service-model/
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