Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-l1csm-yang-07.txt

tom petch <ietfc@btconnect.com> Fri, 14 September 2018 11:53 UTC

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Subject: Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-l1csm-yang-07.txt
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----- Original Message -----
From: "Leeyoung" <leeyoung@huawei.com>
To: "tom petch" <ietfc@btconnect.com>om>; <ccamp@ietf.org>
Sent: Thursday, September 13, 2018 5:06 PM

Hi Tom,

Thanks for your comments and suggestions. All your comments have been
incorporated in the revision (08) except the length of the description.
YANG doctor did not raise this issue. Let me know if this is a problem.
Can you point to where I can find the character limit for the
description? The two places that exceed 90 characters in the description
were due to your comment to add  IETF copy right statement.

<tp>

The limit I have in mind is the limit for all RFC, which is
72 characters, as specified in RFC7994.

draft-kwatsen-netmod-artwork-folding is intended to be a BCP which helps
here.

In -07,  description clauses, such as
         "LW-PMD-clause-52 Optical Interface function for 10GBASE-W
PCS-49-WIS-50";
are too long but I think that this is fixed in -08 although it is quite
tight.  I am not sure where you start counting from.

However, I think that the comment line
      /* optical interface func needs to expand for Fiber Channel, SONET
and SDH */
is still too long

The other changes look good (but I have not read parts of -08 yet)

Tom Petch

Thanks.
Young

-----Original Message-----
From: CCAMP [mailto:ccamp-bounces@ietf.org] On Behalf Of tom petch
Sent: Thursday, September 13, 2018 6:55 AM
To: ccamp@ietf.org
Subject: Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-l1csm-yang-07.txt

Another stray thought

there are no reference statements for the imports which I think there
should be e.g.

  import ietf-yang-types {
  reference "RFC 6991 - Common YANG Data Types";
  prefix "yang";
  }

  import ietf-l1-service-types {
  reference "RFC XXXX - A Yang Data Model for L1 Connectivity
          Service Model (L1CSM)";
    prefix "l1-st";

Tom Petch

----- Original Message -----
From: "t.petch" <ietfc@btconnect.com>
To: <ccamp@ietf.org>
Sent: Tuesday, September 11, 2018 12:48 PM
Subject: Re: I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-l1csm-yang-07.txt


> Young
>
> Some more stray thoughts.
>
> Those pesky security people have just updated TLS so the reference for
> that is now RFC8446
>
> The netmod group did not update the details of the YANG Module Names
> registry in RFC7950 so a better reference, in the IANA Considerations,
> is RFC6020; elsewhere I think that RFC7950 is the better reference.
>
> You have 'Yang' in the Title, Introduction and in two of the reference
> statements, all of which I think should be 'YANG' ('yang' is of course
> correct in other places)
>
> Some of the lines of description in the YANG module are over 90
> characters, which is too long for an RFC.
>
> Tom Petch
>
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: <internet-drafts@ietf.org>
> To: <i-d-announce@ietf.org>
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> Sent: Thursday, August 30, 2018 7:22 PM
>
> > A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts
> directories.
> > This draft is a work item of the Common Control and Measurement
Plane
> WG of the IETF.
> >
> >         Title           : A Yang Data Model for L1 Connectivity
> Service Model (L1CSM)
> >         Authors         : G. Fioccola
> >                           K. Lee
> >                           Y. Lee
> >                           D. Dhody
> >                           D. Ceccarelli
> > Filename        : draft-ietf-ccamp-l1csm-yang-07.txt
> > Pages           : 25
> > Date            : 2018-08-30
> >
> > Abstract:
> >    This document provides a YANG data model for Layer 1 Connectivity
> >    Service Model (L1CSM). This YANG model is NMDA-compliant.
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
> > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-ccamp-l1csm-yang/
> >
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> > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-l1csm-yang-07
> >
> > A diff from the previous version is available at:
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