[CCAMP] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-ccamp-alarm-module-08: (with COMMENT)

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Barry Leiba has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-ccamp-alarm-module-08: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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— Section 3.2 —

A nit:
   For example, a system with digital inputs that allows users to
   connects detectors (e.g., smoke detector) to the inputs.

This is a sentence fragment ans also has a number error in “connects”.

NEW
An example is a system with digital inputs that allows users to connect
detectors, such as smoke detectors, to the inputs. END