Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-l1csm-yang-07.txt

tom petch <ietfc@btconnect.com> Thu, 13 September 2018 11:54 UTC

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Another stray thought

there are no reference statements for the imports which I think there
should be e.g.

  import ietf-yang-types {
  reference "RFC 6991 - Common YANG Data Types";
  prefix "yang";
  }

  import ietf-l1-service-types {
  reference "RFC XXXX - A Yang Data Model for L1 Connectivity
          Service Model (L1CSM)";
    prefix "l1-st";

Tom Petch

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> Young
>
> Some more stray thoughts.
>
> Those pesky security people have just updated TLS so the reference for
> that is now RFC8446
>
> The netmod group did not update the details of the YANG Module Names
> registry in RFC7950 so a better reference, in the IANA Considerations,
> is RFC6020; elsewhere I think that RFC7950 is the better reference.
>
> You have 'Yang' in the Title, Introduction and in two of the reference
> statements, all of which I think should be 'YANG' ('yang' is of course
> correct in other places)
>
> Some of the lines of description in the YANG module are over 90
> characters, which is too long for an RFC.
>
> Tom Petch
>
>
> ----- Original Message -----
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> > A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts
> directories.
> > This draft is a work item of the Common Control and Measurement
Plane
> WG of the IETF.
> >
> >         Title           : A Yang Data Model for L1 Connectivity
> Service Model (L1CSM)
> >         Authors         : G. Fioccola
> >                           K. Lee
> >                           Y. Lee
> >                           D. Dhody
> >                           D. Ceccarelli
> > Filename        : draft-ietf-ccamp-l1csm-yang-07.txt
> > Pages           : 25
> > Date            : 2018-08-30
> >
> > Abstract:
> >    This document provides a YANG data model for Layer 1 Connectivity
> >    Service Model (L1CSM). This YANG model is NMDA-compliant.
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
> > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-ccamp-l1csm-yang/
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