[CCAMP] AD review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-signaling-g709v3

"Adrian Farrel" <adrian@olddog.co.uk> Sun, 18 August 2013 19:11 UTC

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Here is my usual AD review of this document.  You have approached a
pretty icky-complex topic well, and produced a readable (if technical)
document. Well done!

I have only a few nits as comments and propose to enter them as IETF
last-call comments as the document moves forward. (They care copied
below for your information).

The next thing you should see is the IETF last call announcement.



Please fix the two lines that are too long (see idnits)


Please expand "OTN" on first use in the main text.
Please expand "TS" on its first use.



   The ingress node of an LSP MAY include Label ERO (Explicit Route 
   Object) to indicate the label in each hops along the path.

Missing "subobject".



   When an upstream node receives a Resv message containing an 



Please consider and note what updates to GMPLS management tools are

Are there any changes to the Alarms that might arise? We have a document
for that.

Are there any changes to the way OAM is controlled? We have a document
for that.

Should the new G-PIDs show in the TC MIB managed by IANA at
This should happen automgically when the feeding registries are updated
but it is probably best to add a specific request for IANA.

Will other MIB work be needed (in the future) to make it possible to 
read new information (labels, tspecs) from network devices?


Please fix so that you have three sections:

Authors' Addresses (only those people on the front page)
Contributors (other people who made significant text contributions to
the document)
Acknowledgements (other people who helped with the work)


[OTN-OSPF] should be a normative reference for its use to define the 
value of the switching type used in signaling.