Re: [CCAMP] Fw: I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-tunnel-model-04.txt

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From: tom petch <ietfc@btconnect.com>
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While you are at it

- the YANG module file statement needs a date on it e.g. as in
draft-ietf-ccamp-mw-yang

- I see G.709 referenced in the YANG module but do not see a reference
that matches this in the I-D References

- I see
I-D.ietf-teas-yang-te
in the YANG module but not in the I-D References

- there is a line length limit in RFC which is exceeded in many places
in the YANG module by lines such as
/* Augment egress label restrictions end of connectivity-matrix
information-source */

- IANA Considerations should reference RFC6020 not RFC7950 since RFC7950
does no more than say 'see RFC6020' (something I only just learnt)

Tom Petch

----- Original Message -----
From: "Zhenghaomian (Zhenghaomian, Optical &Microwave Technology
Research Dept)" <zhenghaomian@huawei.com>
Sent: Thursday, August 23, 2018 9:31 AM


> Hi, Tom,
>
> Thanks for point this out, we update the draft, with corresponding
correction.
>
> Best wishes,
> Haomian
>
> -----邮件原件-----
> 发件人: tom petch [mailto:ietfc@btconnect.com]
> 发送时间: 2018年8月14日 19:50
> 收件人: Zhenghaomian (Zhenghaomian, Optical &Microwave Technology
Research Dept) <zhenghaomian@huawei.com>om>; ccamp@ietf.org
> 主题: Re: [CCAMP] Fw: I-D Action:
draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-tunnel-model-04.txt
>
> Meanwhile, there are my usual red tape issues.
>  - no copyright in the YANG modules
>  - no RFC Editor note asking them to update the dates in the modules
>  - no YANG reference statements for the import YANG statements
> - YANG Tree diagrams is now an RFC
>  - no I-D Reference for G.709 as referenced in the module
>
> I find the layout of IANA considerations not as clear as it might be.
I suggest
>
> OLD
>
> It is proposed that IANA should assign new URIs from the "IETF XML
>    Registry" [RFC3688] as follows: URI:
>    urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-otn-tunnel Registrant Contact: The
>    IESG XML: N/A; the requested URI is an XML namespace.  URI:
>    urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-otn-types Registrant Contact: The
>    IESG XML: N/A; the requested URI is an XML namespace.  This
document
>    registers following YANG modules in the YANG Module Names registry
>    [RFC7950].  name: ietf-otn-tunnel namespace:
>    urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-otn-tunnel prefix: otn-tunnel
>    reference: RFC XXXX name: ietf-otn-types namespace:
>    urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-otn-types prefix: otn-types
>    reference: RFC XXXX
>
> NEW
>
> IANA is asked to assign URIs from the "IETF XML Registry" [RFC3688] as
> follows:
>
> URI:  urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-otn-tunnel
> Registrant Contact: The  IESG
> XML: N/A; the requested URI is an XML namespace.
>
> URI: urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-otn-types
> Registrant Contact: The IESG
> XML: N/A; the requested URI is an XML namespace.
>
> IANA is asked to record YANG module names in the "YANG Module Names"
registry [RFC6020] as follows:
>
> name: ietf-otn-tunnel namespace:
> urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-otn-tunnel
> prefix: otn-tunnel
> reference: RFC XXXX
>
> name: ietf-otn-types namespace:
> urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-otn-types
> prefix: otn-types
> reference: RFC XXXX
>
> Just a few more newlines
>
> Tom Petch
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Zhenghaomian (Zhenghaomian, Optical &Microwave Technology
Research Dept)" <zhenghaomian@huawei.com>
> To: <ccamp@ietf.org>
> Sent: Friday, August 10, 2018 8:15 AM
>
> > Dear WG,
> >
> > We update the draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-tunnel-model, mainly updating the
> ietf-otn-types.yang by cleaning the identities. The types model is
imported in the other draft draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-topo-yang for YANG
doctor review.
> >
> > Thank you.
> >
> > Best wishes,
> > Haomian
> >
> > -----邮件原件-----
> > 发件人: CCAMP [mailto:ccamp-bounces@ietf.org] 代表
> internet-drafts@ietf.org
> > 发送时间: 2018年8月10日 15:10
> > 收件人: i-d-announce@ietf.org
> > 抄送: ccamp@ietf.org
> > 主题: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-tunnel-model-04.txt
> >
> >
> > A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts
> directories.
> > This draft is a work item of the Common Control and Measurement
Plane
> WG of the IETF.
> >
> >         Title           : OTN Tunnel YANG Model
> >         Authors         : Haomian Zheng
> >                           Aihua Guo
> >                           Italo Busi
> >                           Anurag Sharma
> >                           Rajan Rao
> >                           Sergio Belotti
> >                           Victor Lopez
> >                           Yunbo Li
> >                           Yunbin Xu
> > Filename        : draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-tunnel-model-04.txt
> > Pages           : 62
> > Date            : 2018-08-10
> >
> > Abstract:
> >    This document describes the YANG data model for OTN Tunnels.
> >
> >
> > The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
> > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-tunnel-model/
> >
> > There are also htmlized versions available at:
> > https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-tunnel-model-04
> >
>
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-tunnel-model-
> 04
> >
> > A diff from the previous version is available at:
> >
https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-tunnel-model-04
> >
> >
> > Please note that it may take a couple of minutes from the time of
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> >
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