Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-dwdm-if-mng-ctrl-fwk-10.txt

Hi Gabriele, 

Thanks for handling my comments. Just a few suggestions - 

- I am not sure if use of wordings from an IESG statement is wise in an I-D. How about we just simply say - 

   The YANG based NETCONF and RESTCONF protocol are better suited for
   creating and modifying configuration state and thus RECOMMENDED to be
   used over SNMP MIB.

- Regarding this text in 4.1.1 

   Is to be noted that the CL (client device) and the DWDM network are
   belonging to the same operator so the DWDM EMS and the Client devices
   are connected to the same DCN and the communication is not affected
   by security issue.

   True, but we can't say that it is not affected by security issues. Maybe reword to say that the existing security consideration continue to apply to CL? It is important that the recommended security settings used while using NetConf/RestConf/SNMP. 

- Move the Appendix to the end of the document (out of the main body). Add a note that this is the information at the time of publication of the document and thus subject to change. 

Thanks! 
Dhruv

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> Subject: Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-dwdm-if-mng-ctrl-fwk-
> 10.txt
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> Dear All,
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> This new draft is addressing the [RTG-DIR] RtgDir review: draft-ietf-
> ccamp-dwdm-if-mng-ctrl-fwk-09
> Review made by Dhruv.
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> Dhruv please let us know any feedbacks and further suggestions.
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> Thanks a lot,
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> On 06/06/2018, 18:17, "CCAMP on behalf of internet-drafts@ietf.org"
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>     A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts
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>     This draft is a work item of the Common Control and Measurement Plane
> WG of the IETF.
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>             Title           : A framework for Management and Control of
> DWDM optical interface parameters
>             Authors         : Ruediger Kunze
>                               Gert Grammel
>                               Dieter Beller
>                               Gabriele Galimberti
>                               Julien Meuric
>     	Filename        : draft-ietf-ccamp-dwdm-if-mng-ctrl-fwk-10.txt
>     	Pages           : 31
>     	Date            : 2018-06-06
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>     Abstract:
>        The control and management of DWDM interfaces are a precondition
> for
>        enhanced multilayer networking.  They are needed to ensure an
>        efficient data transport, to meet the requirements requested by
>        today's IP-services and to provide a further automation of network
>        provisioning and operations.  This document describes use cases,
>        requirements and solutions for the control and management of
> optical
>        interface parameters according to different types of single channel
>        DWDM interfaces.  The focus is on automating the network
> provisioning
>        process irrespective on how it is triggered i.e. by Element Manager
>        System (EMS), Network Management System (NMS) or Generalized Multi
>        Protocol Label Switching (GMPLS).  This document covers management
>        and control considerations in different scenarios of single channel
>        DWDM interfaces.  The purpose is to identify the necessary
>        information and processes to be used by control or management
> systems
>        to properly and efficiently drive the network.
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>     The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
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> fwk/
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> ctrl-fwk-10
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