Re: [CCAMP] Fw: New Version Notification for draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-topo-yang-06.txt

Some minor quirks;

The Requirements language is not the current one - you need a reference
therein to RFC8174 (and you have a lower case 'should')

IANA Considerations - RFC6020 is a better reference than RFC7950 since
all the latter says is read the former!

G.709 is referenced but is missing from the I-D References

NMDA gets mentioned in s.3.1 but the IESG like to see it in Introduction
or Abstract

Where you reference an I-D in the YANG module (which must therefore be
plain text), then to ensure the RFC Editor finds such, rather than
    "I-D.ietf-teas-yang-te-topo: YANG Data Model for
    Traffic Engineering (TE) Topologies";
 I recommend
    "RFC YYYY - YANG Data Model for
    Traffic Engineering (TE) Topologies";
Note to RFC Editor please replace YYYY with the RFC number assigned to
    "I-D.ietf-teas-yang-te-topo"
You can put all the RFC Editor notes in one place at the front - in
fact, the RFC Editor tell me they prefer it that way - but you need to
give each I-D a different reference, XXXX, YYYY, ZZZZ etc
.
Tom Petch

----- Original Message -----
From: "Zhenghaomian (Zhenghaomian, Optical Technology Research Dept)"
<zhenghaomian@huawei.com>
To: "'CCAMP'" <ccamp@ietf.org>
Sent: Monday, February 25, 2019 8:46 AM

> Dear WG,
>
> We have updated this work with the following changes:
>
> - Remove duplication between abstract and introduction session;
> - Add notice of requirements language;
> - Update references;
> - Update YANG models to align with te-topology, which update the
label-step;
>
> We are also having the following open issues:
> - the module ietf-otn-topology now has dependency on the module
ietf-otn-types, which is now included in a less mature
draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-tunnel-model. As the ietf-otn-types are needed in
both OTN topology and tunnels, it may be separated out as another work,
to avoid the future dependency;
> - The YANG module in -06 will be aligned with ietf-otn-types in
draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-tunnel-model-06, which will be updated SOON, at
this very short moment we are reported some errors for YANG validation,
but they will disappear.
> - Some nits detected for YANG editing, and we will fix after talking
with RFC editor.
>
> You are welcome to review and comment, thank you.

As if I need an invitation:-)

> Best wishes,
> Haomian
>
> -----邮件原件-----
> 发件人: internet-drafts@ietf.org [mailto:internet-drafts@ietf.org]
> 发送时间: 2019年2月25日 16:34
> 收件人: Xufeng Liu <xufeng.liu.ietf@gmail.com>; Oscar Gonzalez de Dios
<oscar.gonzalezdedios@telefonica.com>; Zhenghaomian (Zhenghaomian,
Optical Technology Research Dept) <zhenghaomian@huawei.com>; Yunbin Xu
<xuyunbin@ritt.cn>; Aihuaguo (Aihua Guo, CRC) <aihuaguo@huawei.com>;
Oscar de Dios <oscar.gonzalezdedios@telefonica.com>; Lei Wang
<wangleiyj@chinamobile.com>; Sergio Belotti <sergio.belotti@nokia.com>;
Italo Busi <Italo.Busi@huawei.com>; Anurag Sharma <ansha@google.com>
> 主题: New Version Notification for draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-topo-yang-06.txt
>
>
> A new version of I-D, draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-topo-yang-06.txt
> has been successfully submitted by Haomian Zheng and posted to the
IETF repository.
>
> Name: draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-topo-yang
> Revision: 06
> Title: A YANG Data Model for Optical Transport Network Topology
> Document date: 2019-02-25
> Group: ccamp
> Pages: 65
> URL:
https://www.ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-topo-yang-06.t
xt
> Status:
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-topo-yang/
> Htmlized:
https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-topo-yang-06
> Htmlized:
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-topo-yang
> Diff:
https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-topo-yang-06
>
> Abstract:
>    This document describes a YANG data model to describe the
topologies
>    of an Optical Transport Network (OTN).  It is independent of
control
>    plane protocols and captures topological and resource related
>    information pertaining to OTN.  This model enables clients, which
>    interact with a transport domain controller, for OTN topology
related
>    operations such as obtaining the relevant topology resource
>    information.
>
>
>
>
>
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