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Re: [CDNi] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-cdni-request-routing-extensions-05

"Ori Finkelman (IETF)" <ori.finkelman.ietf@gmail.com> Tue, 10 September 2019 08:00 UTC

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Date: Tue, 10 Sep 2019 11:00:24 +0300
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To: Michael Tüxen <tuexen@fh-muenster.de>
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Subject: Re: [CDNi] Tsvart last call review of draft-ietf-cdni-request-routing-extensions-05
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btw,
The double space after period is a result of the xml2RFC tool that adds a
second space after a period with a space.
The only way I found around it is to manually edit the text file after it
was generated.



On Mon, Sep 9, 2019 at 8:51 PM Michael Tüxen via Datatracker <
noreply@ietf.org> wrote:

> Reviewer: Michael Tüxen
> Review result: Ready with Nits
>
> This document has been reviewed as part of the transport area review team's
> ongoing effort to review key IETF documents. These comments were written
> primarily for the transport area directors, but are copied to the
> document's
> authors and WG to allow them to address any issues raised and also to the
> IETF
> discussion list for information.
>
> When done at the time of IETF Last Call, the authors should consider this
> review as part of the last-call comments they receive. Please always CC
> tsv-art@ietf.org if you reply to or forward this review.
>
> I have not identified any transport related issues.
>
> To improve readability, you might want to
> * resolve acronyms on first occurence like CDN, CDNI,...
> * Remove section 1.1, since the introduced abbreviations are not used in
> the text.
> * add a graphical representation of the involved nodes and the messages
> being exchanged between them
>
> Typos:
> * Section 3: the uCDN provide a fallback -> the uCDN provides a fallback
> * Section 6: Nir B.  Sopher -> Nir B. Sopher (no double space after period)
> * Section 6: Kevin J.  Ma -> Kevin J. Ma (no double space after period)
>
>

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